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HorsesRule wrote:

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Character Name: Moonkit

Character Age: less then a moon

Gender: she-cat

Alliance: Shadowclan

Rank: kit

Appearance (6 or more sentences): Moonkit has beautiful, long, silky fur and blue eyes. Her brown fur glistens like the sun in the moonlight. The cute little kit has a white chest, belly, paws, and a hint of white in her face. The little kit had soft stripes and she blends in easily with soil. Her fur is usually well kept unless she is troubled. Moonkit's fur looks beautiful when a soft wind blows and can be anyone's dream cat.

Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below. Those are additional requirements): Moonkit is a sweet, generous cat. She may break the warrior code to help others, but normally sticks to it. She is rather strong too. The cute little kit can get agressive very easily though. She is very defensive towards her friends. She can come in handy in a fight, either to help or stop it. She is unpredictible and very loyal.
---Likes (at least 3): She loves to play around, watch apprentices battle train, and help others.
--- Dislikes (at least 3): Moonkit hates it when cats insult her, her friends, or her family. She also hates it when she messes up in front of everyone, and when she gets in trouble for trying to do something good.
---Strengths (No MORE than 5): She is a great fighter when playing with the other kits, and she can be very sneaky.
---Weaknesses (At least 3): She can panic easily, is not very good in handling grief, and is terrible at making decisions.

History (8 or more sentences):[/b] When she was a little kit, her mother died giving birth. Her dad was then attacked by a wolf and it took him away, probably as prey. Later, her siblings died in the cold of a blizzard. They were all buried in the snow, never to come out again. Moonkit pressed into their fur, weeping sadly. Eventually, all the warmth was sucked from her body, leaving her terribly cold. Grief kept Moonkit from leaving them alone. She was saved by her father who had miracously escaped from the wolf.

Roleplay Sample (Required for first advanced bio): Moonkit sat down, staring at the shimering lake. She felt wind ruffle her fur and longed for her mother. Her blue eyes glowed in the moonlight and she let out a long sigh. Her father came up behind her. "I miss her too," he bent down and gave her a lick. They huddled together in the light of the moon. Her soft fur brushed her father's and they looked out across the lake as stars danced across the water. They both lay down and fell into a peaceful sleep.
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[size=7pt]hello there , i'm fragility ! =3

this bio is coming along nicely , but you still got some choppy sentences and a few spelling mistakes . =3

please lengthen your sentences and then bump this thread so i [ or other staff ] could look over your bio again ! ;3 [/size]

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Character Name:
Eclispesnow
Character Age:
23 moons
Gender:
female
Alliance:
Shadowclan
Rank:
Warrior
Appearance (6 or more sentences): Eclipsesesnow is a pure black cat with sharp forest green eyes. Strangely for her only appreance she was born small. To most cats she looks like an apprentice that was made into a warrior before there first training, she has a tint of white on her chest but not enough, in her eyes there are small flicks of gold and hazel that gives sharp and beautiful look. Her fur is short and well cared for even though it sucks durning leaf-bare for she has to curl up extra tight to keep herself warm or die freezing to death. Her claws are stone sharp, and always ready to slash at someone.

Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below. Those are additional requirements): Eclipsesnow is a silent and courageable she-cat that follows the warriorcode with all her heart. She will dare the break the code if she was to. She loves keeping secrets or finding them herself. She is not one of those flirty she-cats that would do anything to get a mate. In order to do so, you have to work yourself into her heart by giving your best shot. For this almost emotionless she-cat she has a soft spot for the runts of any litter of kits. She had won many times of hearts of kits because of this. She has another side to her which rarely shows, she is also a sweet, kind, and caring cat that loves and respects her clan. If only someone could just break away the scary side of her.
---Strengths (No MORE than 5): She is a great hunter and almost clusmy fighter. Because of her small figure she can fit into small places.
---Weaknesses (At least 3): Begin teased for her size, having to do something that she doesn't want to do. And border patrols she hates them.

History (8 or more sentences): Eclipsesnow was born has a loner, she was found has a kit in shadowclan territory. Her parents abandoned her because of her small size thinking that she would at least die during leaf-bare. Her parents were wrong, she managed to live and surive well in the clan that loved her and cared for her. Eclipsesnow was made into an apprentice durning her least favorite season leaf-bare. Her black fur and her eyes stood out like a phatom durning an blizzard. She shivered through out the whole thing glad to be in the apprentice den to keep warm. She was finally made into a warrior this time greenleaf.

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Character Name:
Forestsun
Character Age:
23 moons
Gender:
male
Alliance:
Windclan
Rank:
warrior
Appearance (6 or more sentences): Forestsun is a orange-and white tabby with long legs. His fur is short and almost bushy. You might say his mother was a thunderclan cat while his father was windclan, but its really neither he was just born with long legs and short fur which looks well bushy. His eyes are forest leaf green making sparkle whenever he walks into the sun. In his eyes are always mirth and happyness. He is a strong cat which makes him nearly has handsome, and goodlooking. He is strong built making his long legs cover good mile before coming to a complete stop. He can almost jump a good distance for he has good long legs to pouncing on rabbits that are more quicker then the rest of his clan.

Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below; those are additional requirements):Forestsun is a good natured cat. He love telling jokes, and stories to kits he is very happy and calm. His eye are always full of joy and happyness. He almost make anycat happy if he tries hard enough. If its something serious he cuts out the funny time and starts going to a more serious cat which humbles and sages almost everyting a cat has to say. Hence his name should have been Forestsoul for he always happy. He cares about his clan, and makes friends with almost anyone.
---Likes (at least 3): Begin around the cats he love, and rabbits he loves chasing them. He also seem to like anything that is beautiful he would just stare at for hours if he could.

--- Dislikes (at least 3): begin alone, serious times, and fighting ever likes to fight

---Strengths (No MORE than 5): Forestsun is a brillant hunter sprinting rabbits is his favorite thing to do. Catching them is a another story. Making people happy his what he does best. Telling stories to kits is what he loves to do.

---Weaknesses (At least 3): He's a horrible fighter, and can't seem to talk to a she-cat that he likes without messing himself up. Oh and going on battle patorls he can't stand them.

History (8 or more sentences): Forestsun was born in windclan durning the middle of leafbare. His mother had passed away from greencough right after he was born that was the sad day for him and his father who both mourned for her. He gave up mourning for his mother and started making cats begin happy and enjoying life like there suppouse to. He would play around for hours without burning out like a flame with endless supple of fuel. When he became an apprentice, starclan help his mentor. He was the most comical and mischeif apprentice there was. He would play around and do his duties without a problem and play and play longer for hours training with his mentor until he was exhasuted beyond exhaustion. Forestsun was finally made into a warrior, he still had fun has a warrior.

Roleplay Sample {Required for first advanced bio}: third.

Comments (optional): none but wow...

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[size=7pt]hello there , i'm fragility ! =]

those bios are amazing , but i observed that some of your sentences are choppy and need lengthening :) you coul try to add more detail to them , or combine some through a comma ;) also , you got some spelling mistakes i'd like you to fix ! x]

fix those from above and then bump this thread so i [ or other staff ] could look over your bio again . :-*[/size]

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Wut? D: You made a new account?
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[size=7pt]yay , someone noticed ! :'D

yeah , i did >w< [/size]

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i feel special . . . owo[/size]

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Character Name:
DarkIntentions

Character Age:
Ten moons

Gender:
Female

Alliance:
Blazingclan

Rank:
Leader

Appearance (6 or more sentences):
DarkIntentions is a pretty she-cat, but doesn't much exceed that. DarkIntentions is really nothing exceptional, she's young, but doesn't have so many notable features one would commit to memory. She's average sized, and has short, soft fur. She is a grey tabby, with cobalt blue eyes. Her legs are long, as well as her tail, and her face narrows to a point. She has a black nose, as well as short whiskers, prminent cheek bones and small pointed ears. Her paws are small, and her frame was built narrow, but long.

Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below. Those are additional requirements):
---Likes (at least 3): DarkIntentions likes tall places, she enjoys being able to see for horizon to horizon- allthought that doesn't meen she hates the forest she lives in. DarkIntentions likes teaching, particularly history on the clan. The clan's history, is infact an eventful one, and she has a knack for story telling. She likes running, she likes being able to cross much distance at her own pace, on her own pads, with no ones help.
--- Dislikes (at least 3):DarkIntentions does not enjoy swimming, or wading through water. Nor does she enjoy crossing great distances on foot. DarkIntentions despises cats that are bullies, because DarkIntentions' mother was crazy and a bully.
---Strengths (No MORE than 5): DarkIntentions is a very good tree-climber, because her long tail allows her extra balance. As well as an good tree-climber, DarkIntentions is very good a running, her long legs allow her long strides at an easy lope she can keep up for hours. DarkIntentions has the skills of a leader, she is good at appealing to cats, and is gifted with the art of words.
---Weaknesses (At least 3): DarkIntentions cannot swim very well, infact, she would probably drown swimming. The only problem is, DarkIntentions feels she is obligated to save every cat that is in trouble, spiritually or physicly. She would throw herself into a river to save an apprentice, even though neither of them could swim. DarkIntentions also has a soft spot for young apprentices in need, if a apprentice asked her nicely enough with enough need in their voice for something, she would be totally blind sided by them.

History (8 or more sentences):
DarkIntentions was born to a mother who despised her. Blazingstar, DarkIntentions mother, loved toms, but hated her kits. Allthough she hated DarkIntentions in particular, and excluded her from the Royal family. No one knew DarkIntentions was a Royal princess until she was an apprentice. Blazingstar sold DarkImtentions' sister to slave traders, and to prove her power, made DarkIntentions watch as the slave traders forced her sister repeatedly. Scarred, DarkIntentions returned home, plotting revenge. She went to the river, and met a slave who had escaped camp, he had no name at the time. They became fast friends, the tom's mother had been a criminal, she had killed her mate and her leader. Blazingstar had hunted his mother down, and taken her slave, but Tigerblood-his mother- had had a kit in Blazingclan, and one day when the tom was five moons old the MCA helped his mother escape, and he continued life without a name. Blazingstar had then blamed the crimes of his mother upon the kit, and so when they met, they realized they were both victims of the crazy leader. They started a rebellion against Blazinstar, allying Hawkclan in the process. DarkIntentions named the tom Flucht, which meens 'for freedom' in a different language. Flucht and DarkIntentions took over the clan, and became leaders. Stripping Blazingstar of all her lives and taking nine from starclan each. Then booting Blazingstar out, blind, and declawed, so that she could do no one any harm ever again.

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I've neglected to make DarkIntentions a bio ever since she was born, I make it now.

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[size=7pt]hello there , i'm fraggy ! :)

amazing bio ! as much as i'd love to accept it , i observed that there are some choppy sentences and spelling mistakes among the bio . could you please fix them ? xD

after done fixing , bump this thread so i [ or other staff ] could review your bio again ! :3 [/size]

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[glow=red,2,300]B --- A --- S --- I --- C --- S [/glow]?!

❥ name : [size=9pt]`` queen mary ``[/size]

❥ age : [size=9pt]`` sixteen moons old ``[/size]

❥ alliance : [size=9pt]`` kittypet ``[/size]

❥ rank : [size=9pt]`` the so-said princess of the family ``[/size]

❥ family : `` [size=9pt]siblings are adolph [ older brother ] && mozart [ also older brother ] . mother and father are deceased . owner is marty gomez . ``[/size]

❥ sexual orientation : [size=9pt]`` straight . `` [/size]

❥mate / crush / kits : [size=9pt]`` xxxx ``[/size]

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Character Name: Halo

Character Age: 3 years of age.

Gender: She-cat

Alliance: ThunderClan

Rank: Warrior

Appearance:

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Halo is a blue-silver tabby she-cat with a white muzzle. She has long legs and a long tail that has a white tip. Her fur is short and always feels like velvet. Her eyes look like the sea after a storm, a calm blue color. She has rather large eyes that always look innocent and surprised. When cats see her they think she is a young apprentice-aged-cat. Toms often go after her because of her beauty and the way she never seems intrested. She looks exactly like her mother and her sister. She tilts her head and wraps her tail around her paws when she talks which makes her look even younger. When she gets nervous she kneads the ground and looks like a kit again.

Personality: She is happy, bubbly, and excited. When cats first see her they think she is clumzy, naive, and strange, but she is really cunning, graceful, and unique. She hates she gets told she looks too young to be her age or when she gets treated like a kit. She has very few friends, but she is very loyal. She will fight to the death for the ones she loves. But all of her friends are getting mates and having less and less time for her. Her sister teases her because she doesn't have a mate yet and her sister already has kits. Her mother scolds her because she turns down every tom that asks to be her mate. But she isn't intrested in toms. She has something else on her mind.
---Likes: She likes sunbathing, drinking the milk to twoleg gives her, and sitting in trees and watching everything around her.
--- Dislikes: She hates being told she looks younger than she is, being treated like a kit, and being told what to do.,
---Strengths: She can swim, climb trees, and knows her way around the twoleg town she lives in. She also knows where to find certain herbs.
---Weaknesses: She looks really young and fragile so she gets pushed around a lot. She's terrified of fire and she rarely ever listens.

History: She was born in her mother's twoleg's house in a soft bed. She was part of a litter with three she-cats and two toms. Only her and one of her sisters stayed in the twoleg town. She was quickly taken home by a young girl and her mother. She was happy being the family pet, sleeping on the girl's pillow and waiting for everybody else to tell her what to do. But after about a year she was dying to do something new. She was sitting outside one day, waiting for her girl to come back, when she saw the sleek pelt of a black tom running through the forest, a mouse in his jaws. She called out to him and he stopped to look at her. He looked frightened. When he ran off she wanted to follow him, but her girl came running through the door and picked her up. She would sit out on her fence waiting to see if she could see anymore cats. She saw a gold tabby, then a white she-cat. The black tom never came back, but the gold tabby and the white she-cat came back over and over again. She only heard them talk once. The gold tabby had called the she-cat Snowfoot and told her to gather some kind of plant for someone called Brookpaw. Halo new she liked these cats after that day, she wanted to be one of them. But how?
She never shared her secret with anyone, just kept on getting harrased by toms and her family. She would watch for the two cats everyday, but they showed up less and less until they just stopped coming. Halo never stopped waiting, she vowed the next time they showed up she would confront them.
She was eating a mouse when she saw her neighbor chasing a black tom. She remembered the tom and when to help him. When she got him to safety he told her he was from ThunderClan and that he was getting someherbs for the clan. Another cat, Moonclaw, was with him and brought Halo back to the camp. She wasn't liked in the beginning, but she quickly proved that she was a good warrior and loyal to the end. She never went home to twoleg and she fought in battles against the other Clans.

Roleplay Sample: Halo lifted her head from the pink pillow she was laying on. Kristi, her girl, snored quietly. It was Saturday and she didn't have to get up. Halo stood up, careful not to wake Kristi, and stretched out. Her back arched and she purred in comfort. Her stomach let out a loud noise of hunger and she wrinkled her nose in annoyance. She wanted to go outside. Her stomach let out another protest and Halo gave in.
She padded to the kitchen and saw her bowl was filled with milk and the other with kibble. She nibbled on the kibble and shook her head. It was nasty. She turned to the milk and lapped it up with her tongue. The white liquid spilt on the floor and got in her fur. She hissed in frustration and anger. The open window called to her, she needed to get outside. She leaped up on the table under the window and put her paws on the widowsill. A mouse was sitting on the ground. She licked her lips, the mouse smelled good. She dropped down from the windowsill and watched the mouse. She was pretty good at hunting, better than her sister and mother.
She crouched down low and stalked towards her prey. It was eating some grain her twoleg had thrown out that morning. When she was only a tail length away she launched at it. Her front paws hit the mouse's back before it could let out a squeak. She picked it up and broke its neck before looking around for a place to eat in peace. A lawn chair with clear view of the forest seemed like a good spot. She trotted towards it and crawled underneath. She bit into the soft flesh of the mouse and watch the woods while she chewed.
She had just taken another bite when she saw the black pelt bolt from the woods, a huge brown tom on his heels. Halo jumped to feet and took off after the toms. She quickly gained ground and was neck and neck with the brown tom when she took in the scent of the black tom. He reeked of fear and something else. He smelt like other cats.
"Bruce!" Halo scolded and looked at the brown tom. He lived in the twoleg nest beside her. "Let the cat go!"
"Go drink some milk, Halo!" the tom retorted. Halo bristled and unsheathed her claws. It was hard to run and plan an attack at the same time. Bruce was big, but he didn't know how to fight. Halo knew how to fight. She had beat Bruce at a fight before.
"Bruce, I said stop chasing the cat!" she snarled and hooked around so she was standing in front of the brown tom. He was forced to stop or run straight into her.
"Come on, Halo! I was just having some fun!" he whined.
"Then go chase that stick you love so much," she shot back and readied he muscles to fight. Bruce pulled his lips back into a growl and lifted his paw, but Halo was quicker. She scratched the tom's cheek and bared her teeth. Bruce hissed, but back away. Halo watched him retreat.
"Thank you," a voice from behind her said quietly. Halo turned to him and tilted her head.
"Who are you?" she asked bluntly.
"My name is Ravenfang and I'm a ThunderClan warrior!" the tom said proudly.
"My name's Halo," she told him.
"Ravenfang, get away from the kittypet!" a voice from behind them yowled.

Comments: Halo will keep her name even when she joins the Clan.

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[size=7pt]hello there , i'm fragility ! :]]

this bio is amazing and is almost ready for approval , but i observed that you have some choppy sentences that need lengthening ; try to add more detail or combine some through a comma . halo needs to change her name if she joins a clan :]] she has to get a warrior name if she joins thunderclan :3

please fix those errors from above and then bump this thread so i [ or other staff ] could review your bio again ! >w< [/size]

one step before another . be sure you look gorgeous , mary . very gorgeous . a sweet tuned voice rang in the white coated she - cat's head . a calm and premeditated prudence could be seen in her every step , among with a great amount of grace ; she tried to look that gorgeous all the time , but with two older brothers like her's , it's quite impossible . a brave but turbulent aristocracy seemed to follow her everywhere , accompanied by her dandified , pretty - girl sort of figure and a sharp and intelligent face ; yes , she was queen mary , named after queen mary I of england . yes , the one that bathed in blood . mary looked so innocent , with kitish blue eyes , that were generously freckles with darker shades of the same color ; wrong . a cold, hard, frosty penuriousness was her prevalent characteristic , among with the talent of being a perfect lier , cruelty , lust and something she couldn't quite tell ... perhaps , the desire of dominance ? that must be it ; and with all those features , mary was just perfect for a dictator .

her owner was near , reading a magazine for handsome boys like him ; oh , how she loved that black - haired , tanned man ! and what was even cooler about him was that he loves mary the most and that made her brothers angry and jealous ; he pampers her to the extreme , it's pretty obvious . not far away , there was a male , a male that caught her attention ; he had an exotic scent for her nose . the young cat titled her head in a rather cute manner , stopping her walk and sitting down like a doggy . the scent confused her . " hey there ! " mary said as she caught the sight of the tom , yet not moving from her comfortable position . " can you come over here ? "

[size=7pt]tacking ! x] [/size]

[size=7pt]can you reserve me the artist ? will post the form asap >w< [/size]

[size=7pt]lolz , that's fine with me =] * actually likes to play a boy over a girl * [/size]

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•{ coralie jeanette hollingberry;;

•{ look at me and tell me what you see ; but , oh , what could you see behind those pretty green eyes ? ;;

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•{ nick name ;; corry && hello kitty , but she only allows her best friends to call her like that

•{ age ;; sixteen years old

•{ gender ;; it's pretty obvious that she is a girl

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•{ height ;; 170 cm
•{ weight ;; 55 kg
•{ hair color ;; brunette
•{ eyes color ;; blue with a strikingly large amount of gold around the pupil. i like to say that she had blue eyes because of the dark-blue rim around the iris and the dark-blue-and-white rays in the main part of the iris . her eyes are high-contrasted that look green in certain lights
•{ skin tone ;; pale

•{ clothing style ;;

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•{ body modifications ;; xxxx ;;

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•{ personality ;;
coralie is the type of girl you'd love to have around , she's the type that makes the whole gang laugh , the type that is childish and yet knows to make mature choices . the type the whole school knows and love , and that gives a bad time to the teacher . shortly , the type everybody loves . she's random , very random ; and has this thing for " my little pony " -- especially rainbowdash -- and hello kitty . she's cute , with that high yet mature voice of hers .

bad things about her ? she's a capricorn , which means she's stubborn , very . arguing with parents ? daily routine . sharp tongued , nasty when angered , penurious ? her prevalent characteristics . you simply don't want to get on this girl's bad side , nor make her an enemy , for she's not forgiving . with those blue yet deadly eyes of her , with a gaze so similar to an old crow's and her perfect , refined lips that can only give cold kisses , she comes off intimidating without saying a single word .

but going over those errors of her , coralie is sensible , and any hit or bad words can make her cry or at least shake up a little bit ; her heart , oh her heart , is a lot more sensible than the glass nightingale gewgaw your grandma owns , and can break every moment .

but it was broken so many times already .

loneliness ? stop mentioning that , she hates it . loneliness and darkness , two things that terrify coralie so much ; but what's true , is that she's not afraid of them , but just hates experiment them again .

so to get it straight ; coralie is a three - faced girl . one that is so pleasant to every one , one you shouldn't met and one that is deeply hidden inside her heart , the sensible one . because just coralie can be that bipolar ; or may i say , tripolar ?
•{ history ;; i'm going to make it as short as possible ; she has three other siblings , two boys and a girl , and lived happily with her both parents until she was three . it was a sunny day in her town -- and i still remember the day , 6 april 1997 -- and she , her siblings are parents were supposed to visit their beloved grandparents -- which are now still living -- . oh , what a wonderful family they made ! a family filled with blue eyes and blond hair -- excepting , of course , coralie -- . a family filled with talents . her dad , oh her dad ! what a man , a man worth the trust of the whole world ; a black - haired , blue - eyed , well built forty years old man . his name ? eric , eric hollingberry ; british . well , her dad was filled with excitement to see his parents again ; so excited he didn't payed attation to the road anymore . i think you guess what happened ; car crash . her dad ? dead . her sister ? dead . her mother ? gravely injured . her older brother ? clinically dead . she and her younger brother ? traumatized .

after the incident . . . well , they couldn't live a normal life anymore . her older brother had grave traumas and turned schizophrenic and mildly autistic , her mom couldn't smile as often as she did and she . . . she was still intact . nothing seemed to change , but as she grew up and turned 13 , she became quite the troublemaker and argued with her mother daily . she was always on the streets with her friends , and started drinking .

but then she turned fifteen and things changed ; her brother married and moved in europe and her mother . . . well , her mother needed someone to love her true , so she was mostly out , rarely frequenting home ; and so , coralie grew up to be afraid of loneliness , and especially darkness . but now , one year later , she managed to " jump over " those little " phobias " of her and now , look ! she's boarding to the plane to france ! i mean , DUUH , it's france ! france , paris , city of love . . . ye got it .
•{ turn ons ;;
` when boys make cute faces
` that sexy half - smirk
` red and blond hair
` green eyes
` tattoos and piercings
•{ turn offs ;;
` smokers
` drugs
` obnoxious peoples
` jerks and idiots
` peoples , especially boys , that don't know how to dress
•{ likes ;;
` ice cream
` tea
` music
` hello kitty
` rainbows
` sunny days
` the beach
` british accents
` animals ;;
•{ dislikes ;;
` drugs
` smoke
` coffee
` s***** music
` really heavy rock
` reptiles

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•{ rname ;; usefraggy ;3
•{ display ;; the same xD
•{ how can we call you ? ;; fraggy >w<
•{ activity ;; nine out of ten
•{ other ;; xxxx

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[size=7pt]still got some choppy sentences ! ;) [/size]

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two against two , ha ! :P [/size]

translucentkit --- paw --- oblivion

G E ND E R

male .

A P P E A R A N C E

the petite , slender blue tabby of the litter ; that's translucentkit .

B U I L T ?! : translucentkit is a small cat , almost undersized , with long legs and a thin waist , an athletic built made specially for running . translucent is a dandified, pretty-boy-looking sort of figure with those jewel eyes of his and facial features that all tend to refinement .

E Y E S ?! : translucent's eyes indicate a subtle and sensitive kitten who is attuned to the unseen and whose flexibility puts him several steps ahead of the crowd . his eyes are of a fluid and subtle color that has connotations of water, weather, changeability, mysticism and that shows a ridiculous amount of wisdom ; wisdom that can betray even the most learned . translucentkit owns a piercing pair of cloud-gray eyes that are a soft-looking, muted, luminous, medium- to pale true-gray and yet that have an equal ratio of blue and white rays in the iris ; and they always seem to be so dreamy , melancholic and moody . he has perfectly round eyes that give him a rather innocent look that physically fits him so -- but not psychically -- ; the extremities of both eyes tend to be sharper than the rest , but still give translucentkit an naive and fragile allure .

C O A T ?! : translucent is your stereotypical mackerel blue tabby ; he has vertical, gently curving stripes on the side of the body. the stripes are narrow, and are broken into bars and spots on the flanks and stomach. a "M" shape appears on translucent's forehead. he also have a 'peppered' nose, which means black spots appear along the pink tip of the nose.

F U R ?! : translucentkit' fur is short and silky , and is patterned with your everyday meckerel blue tabby patterns .

P E R S O N A L I T Y

translucentkit is very intelligent, although his kitsh appearance and demeanor can cause other to question his abilities. he is highly observational, and can see through other animal's camouflages . he is proficient when it comes to multitasking, and is able to make up to four decisions at the same time .

despite his high abilities, translucent has a low social knowledge and is bad at interacting with others. translucent can stick to certain cats and then grow dependent to them , sometimes even asking them to accompany him in doing things only because it's the first time experiencing them .

he is very calm, and it's quite hard to get him angered or even a little bit mad , and even if you do , there would be no reaction coming from him . although a seemingly straight faced individual, he will often smirk when getting something right , and does it many times when winning an argument . he has a strange sense of humor , and is able to make a gang laugh pretty hard , but because of his lack of social skills , it won't probably happen .

translucent seems to suffer of adhd , as he forgets lots of things he's asked to do and needs to do something constantly , that or he might go crazy . no " toy " or activity ever held his interest for more than a few minutes and he often darts off without warning, seemingly unaware of the dangers of a the woods or the twoleg places .

he's also afraid of dark . no , in fact , he's terrorized of the dark ; you just can't let him alone in the nursery , that or he might start crying and screaming ; and we don't want that . obviously , he's not afraid of the darkness itself, but fear of possible or imagined dangers concealed by the darkness; like , a cat from another clan . you see , translucent doesn't believe in such fiddlesticks like ghosts and phantoms and whatnot ; no , he's very rational and only believes what he sees . but that doesn't mean he's not imaginative ; a cat with such big intellect like him has to be imaginative .

P L O T S

who was the angel
who fought wing and bone
to overthrow heaven
and lay claim to its throne .

the first fallen was Satan
who made his last stand
then came his rebel angels
and the old clip-clop man...

this is more of long timed plot xD

translucentkit always had been an outcast , or at least someone with a lack of social skills , and that always longed for love ; all types of love . he always watched those happy couple cuddling each other , loving each other , missing each other ; and him ? him , the -- almost -- perfect , emotionless tom standing in the shadow , watching everybody from above . he was jealous , envious . and those feeling quickly took over his innocent , fragile , naive mind . and he began to rot , to grow blacker everyday .

and yet another rotting soul that is left to yearn for love , lust .

the day translucentkit turned six moons , and was made an apprentice , it was maybe the happiest of his life -- after , of course , the day he was born -- . he was messing around the camp , proud of his new statute and everyone that saw him congratulated the newly made apprentice . he was walking and walking and walking , until something caught his gray gaze ; a she-cat . yes , a she-cat . in fact , the most beautiful she-cat he ever saw . it was strange for him , the sentiment he felt that moment ; it was a combination between love , greed and something he couldn't quite recognize . perhaps , dominance ? the she-cat , a beautiful long furred calico and that owned the most gleaming , cunning pair of green eyes , took a deep breath and walked over the apprentice ; she was a loner and such a charming one !they talked and talked , and reached to befriend each other ; the female made him show such alien emotions .

two months . they met in secret two months , until the she-cat made him follow her deep into the woods ; and that was it . it turned out that the she-cat wasn't a loner , but a rogue , and she was part of a seven members rogue group ; and they tucked him to sleep in the most bloody manner .

he was translucentpaw , the perfect , emotionless kit of the litter . he was raised in big expectations ; and yet , a single cat of the opposite gender made his whole perfect world go crazy . he couldn't forgive her for that ; in fact , inside him , there grew a hate for she - cats , a disgust . then he found out that he wasn't alone , but sharing a room with three other animals ; a snake , a dog and a crow ( what a diversity ! ) . they were captured as well , they all reached to befriend the same devilish she-cat ; hey were prisoners .

you can call her a femme fatale .

they were going to be sold as slaves , but before that , they had to learn who's the boss ; through beating and starving . translucentpaw never stopped thinking and thinking and thinking , his mind working to the maximum , just to find a way to escape this hell . it was for the first time he said something rather shocking .

" i don't know "

but they managed to do it , somehow ; in a way that shocked everyone . the she-cat , the demon dressed as a cat , helped them out , and then confessed that she loved translucentkit , that she loved him very , very much ; an argument between them . between him and his only , true , pure love . she ran away , heartbroken and him , he showed no emotions ; in fact , he was more uninterested than before . a storm . a storm that made trees bow , a storm close to The Flood . not caring about the small she-cat , he -- and the others -- jumped on the husky's back and began fighting with the rain , struggling to escape ; what he didn't knew was that the she-cat was following him , calling out his name softly , drowned and pushed in all the ways by the wind . but when he turned around , and saw the she-cat's small frame collapsing , he cried for the first time . the blizzard that was held above his head didn't meant anything to him when he buried his head into the she-cat's neat pelt , crying and yelling like a tornado , calling her name but everything was in vain ; she was dead , and them , in the middle of nowhere .

translucent never showed that much emotions .

so the storm calmed down , but the storm inside translucent wasn't going to calm down that easily ; he was devastated , but didn't showed it . " i don't know what happened that day , but it made me rational thinking stop " .

four small animals , in the middle of nowhere .

an old husky whose bone cracked here and there every time he moved [ a G U A R D I A N ]
a small snake , who wasn't even venomous , but dangerous in it's way [ a H U N T E R ]
a death - longing crow [ a W A T C H E R ]
and a painfully brilliant cat [ a L E A D E R ]

so tell me , how were they going to survive , this small team , without any hopes and followed by a pack of rabid wolves ? i tell you , they weren't . his life was hard enough until now , and little translucentkit [ that was now fourteen moons and supposed to be a translucentoblivion ] suffered too many traumas and dramas for his young age . it was about survival ; kill or be killed . they were the pray , and them , the hunter . the crow , he was set there as a sentinel . the husky , the one that protected them . a small snake , the one that was supposed to bring them food . and translucent , the one that lead them to death .

they all died . the husky was killed by the wolves while trying to save the crow , the crow was killed by the wolves while trying to warn the snake , and the snake died trying to protect the " leader " . and the leader ? the leader was fine , wounded , but alive .

he had to survive .

the life of a loner wasn't easy . he wanted to go back home . he missed his siblings . he missed his dad . he missed his mom's warm belly . he even missed those grumpy elders . he missed grandpa , he missed grandma , he missed everyone . but he continued to keep a straight face all the time , but inside ... inside he was rotting , he was dying .

then [ yes , then . the word that makes tranlucent's life go on and on ] there was a twist in his life . a male , a tall , brown cat with the most piercing golden eyes . a male whose smile could melt even the most heartless warrior ; the cat whose name was unknown . the cat that took translucent under his loving wing and bought him to his clan's camp , where he was treasured just like a jewel .

happy ending , huh ? of course not !

in that clan there was another male , one moon older than him [ translucent was eighteen moons old ] and that was the most beautiful male he had ever seen ; might it be love , again ? the clan had a strange rule . the leader would chose a group of ten and then let them conquer for the title of deputy apprentice , then deputy , then leader apprentice , then -- finally -- leader . translucent , that cat , a cat's close friend and some more cats were chosen . but at the same time , the clan acted like an orphanage ; loners , rogues , expelled cats would come there and chose a kitten to rise ; everytime a cat came , friendships , relationships were broken forever , but this doesn't quite interests us .

translucent and that male never got along , that male hated translucent and translucent didn't cared about him ; translucent was the favorite to the title of leader , because of his painful brilliance . one day , they were given a type of project , about poisons , so that they could get along . they tried to get along while working at the project [ they had to make a type of report about the effects of different poisons ] , and sometimes they forgot with who they were talking to and acted like friends -- or at least two cats that didn't hated each other -- but the result was horrible .

translucent poisoned the other male . he made him mad , he made him make crazy things and even hurt his best friend . on the other side , the other male made translucent to want to feel things he had never felt before , like greed , lust , envy . they got each other addicted to the other , but never actually showed it . their leader was the kindest cat you would ever met , and translucent always went to talk to him whenever he wanted , but he was old and later died , leaving a huge , irreplaceable spot in everyone's heart . the male's and tranlucent's relation just got worse .

a new cat was chosen to replace the leader , but he ... he was the devil . everyday he would chose a cat -- kit apprentice , warrior , elder etc ... -- , any cat , and then would take translucent and force the young cat watch him beat the cat to death and translucent just couldn't protest , and that emotionless face never seemed to leave him . cat after cat , they were killed , brutally by the cruel leader . then it came the male's turn to have his days ended . but that time it was different . that time , he was asked to kill the male . and he said " no . "

we are like black and white , together we're completing each other . i have what he doesn't and he , what i don't . he's like my brother from another mom and even though he hates me , i love him . i love everyone equally and it had been a hell for me to watch them die one after one and i accepted , because it was your choice and you are my leader , the one i respect the most . but no , this cat ... i can't kill him . he's special , our relationship is special . " and then he landed a sweet kiss on the cruel leader's cheek , which was crossed by large tears . the male was also crying , weak and bloody ; translucent walked over him and placed his head on his belly and told him .

" [ cat's name here ] , who do you love ? "

" i love old leader . " was the weak male's answer . " then let him take you . " translucent said in a quiet voice , not to be heard , his tone sweeter than anything . " does it hurts , dying ? " " no , of course it doesn't , it's even more peaceful than sleep . " and then translucent raised his head to the pure blue sky , muzzle slightly parted to breathe and then from deep within his throat , a peaceful , sweet lullaby escaped his refined lips , as the other male struggled between life and death against translucent's silky belly . " i hate you .... i hate you .... I HATE YOU SO F****G MUCH ! " the other male yelled , life puring out of him .

i know that you hate me , and i would never like you stop doing that . i am not going to let you stop hating me . the male's eyes widened as translucent made the most strange reaction he ever did ; he smiled . a smile so warm , so gentle that it was even calmer than the old leader's . the male called translucent's name once again , and then gave his life to the old leader's ; translucent landed another sweet lick on the male's forehead and a single , innocent , crystalline tear made his way down the cat's cheek and to his chin . he looked into the cruel leader's eyes once more , his gaze full of kindness , and then got up and headed out the camp . and as he passed by , cats were looking at him , and whispers of his bravery could be heard . translucent only smiled . he escaped that hell he almost called home , and didn't looked back . he was aged 26 .

" i can't look back . that place is just a bounder of the past . "

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N a m e:
Cloudkit--Cloudpaw--Cloudnine

A g e:
Twenty-seven moons

G e n d e r:
Tom

A l l i a n c e:
ThornClan

R a n k:
Warrior

A p p e a r a n c e:
Cloudnine is a large, burly warrior with a long white coat, pure and smooth as untouched snow. This coat often gets messy, but rarely looks that way for long, as Cloudnine likes to groom himself regularly, knowing that his fur is easily matted due to its length. This tom has odd eyes, a trait that is not uncommon in pure white cats. One of his eyes is an emerald green, whilst the other is a bright amber, similar to a burning flame. Cloudnine is built for battle, and with his broad shoulders and muscular frame, he is certainly a difficult opponent in a fight. Even just by looking at him it's not difficult to realise that he is a strong cat; with a build that large and imposing, imagining him to be weak is like imagining a cold sun. Overall, Cloudnine is a pure white long-haired tom with odd eyes and a large, muscular build.

P e r s o n a l i t y:
The most important thing to remember about this warrior is his quick temper, but also his ability to hide anger. With a short fuse, Cloudnine would constantly be shouting if it wasn't for his ability to appear calm in a frustrating situation. However, if someone goes too far, he will fly off the handle and have a go at them, although it is unlikely that he will attack if the cat is a Clanmate or a friend. Underneath his fiery temper, Cloudnine is a gentle giant who loves to be around cats he knows and likes, and he is always ready to make new friends. Cloudnine's loyalty is undoubtable, although he may sometimes appear aloof towards those he doesn't know or dislikes. He is initially a friendly tom, but he can be rather unpleasant when it comes to strangers and whoever he doesn't like.

L i k e s:
+ Company
+ ThornClan
+ Meeting new cats

D i s l i k e s:
+ Hunting
+ Disloyalty
+ Bullies

S t r e n g t h s:
+ Fighting
+ Loyal
+ Honest

W e a k n e s s e s:
+ Hunting
+ Aloof
+ His temper

H i s t o r y:
Cloudnine was born as a loner in a litter of four, with three sisters and no brothers to grow up with. His father left before the kits were born, and Cloudnine [then just Cloud], was left as the only tom in the family, surrounded by she-cats. Instead of sulking about it, Cloud took over as the protector of his family from the age of around two moons, although he could hardly do anything if anyone attacked. At the age of four moons, the kits' mother took them to ThornClan and left them on the border, making Cloud promise to care for his sisters. When Cloud had promised, his mother left without a look back, and a patrol soon found the kits, taking them back to the Clan. Throughout the rest of his kithood, Cloudkit wouldn't let anyone near his sisters in fear of them getting hurt, but once they were made apprentices this was no longer possible. They all had separate mentors, and there was nothing he could do about it. Cloudpaw trained hard, and after what seemed like forever, he was made a warrior and earned the name Cloudnine. He has now been a warrior for a while, and is proud to call himself a loyal member of ThornClan.

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[size=7pt]there was a game called cloudnine xD

accepted ! :3[/size]

[size=7pt]nuuh , wait 'til i finish mah charrie ! D: [/size]