Posts by Foxtail#1

WOAH! :) I wanted to keep a limit of three cats per player at the max. It's to give other players a chance so I'd try to narrow it down a little. :)

Fox licked her lips. "Mmmm, rabbit. I can't catch many of them in the forest." She looked at Chaos. "What else is there?"

OCC: I'm confused. Did Solarstar die or was she overthrown? :) Sorry...I feel stupid...

Owl's eyes were still wide with fear. She wanted to believe the she-cat, but part of her still had many trust issues. Her mother's vioce spoke in the back of her mind. You're here. They will protect you like I couldn't have. Your safe. Owl relaxed alittle and stuck close to the she-cat. Then a question popped into her mind. "Did I get lost? I thought that you were the Clan, not the Tribe."

That's good. Invite as many people as you want as long as we still have characters. I'm going to describe where they live.

They live in dense woodland with mazes of creeks. There are many fallen trees that create bridges for them to cross over. The creeks cause constant mist and fog (hence the name). It's dark, but not too dark. It's more like the night with a high full moon. They're silent and stealthy, brushing past undergrowth and silently crossing bridges. They don't call themselves a tribe or a clan because they've never heard of those. They call themselves The Cats of the Forest of Endless Mist. (A mouthful, I know.) :)
Their camp is a large fallen tree that has woven branches in the branches to create a small clearing and walls that shelter from the wind. The leader's den is made of the tinner branches that are found near the toppermost part of the tree. The nursery is farther in the middle and made of thicker branches to block out the wind. The elders den is similar, except smaller, and right next to it. The warriors den is infront of the nursery and elders den to protect them. The apprentice den is near the warriors to help them defend the younger and older cats. The medicine cat's den is near the medicine cats den to help eachother interpret signs from their ancestors. It's made of more ferns and softer matierials to give it a cleaner feel.

Maybe we can start role playing and other people will join. :) Uh, I guess I can start. I'm going to play extra cats right now until more people join and you can do the same. :)

Foxstar yawned and padded out in the center of camp. She walked over to Ashtips, who'd been assigning patrols. "And Nightfang, you can lead the hunting patrol," she finished. Foxstar nodded in approval and padded over to the nursery. Harenose had been there most recent queen, and she wanted to make sure that she was comtfortable enough. "Morning, Harenose. Is everything alright in the nursery?"

:) I finished mine. Here it is.

The rope dung deeper into the skin around her mouth as the man tied it harder around her head. Kia’s eyes darted around in fright. She’d agreed to do one party to see if she liked the job, and now this happened. Her mascara ran down her face as her oily tears flooded her eyes. God help me, she prayed.
The man shoved her into his car and drove off. She bounced around in the trunk and banged her head harshly against the door when he hit a pot-hole. Her brown curls fell in front of her face when the car came to a sudden stop. When the trunk popped open, she was thrown out of in and landed harshly on a gravel drive. He grabbed her by her long hair and dragged her into a building.
She saw it was finely furnished, as if a wealthy person lived there. A man was at a front desk and her attacker walked up to him. “Room 26,” he said. “Clean up when I’m done.”
I’m going to die, I’m going to die. I’ll be raped and murdered in some sort of hotel for men to do as they please. Why? “Come here.” He pulled her hair harder and thrust her into the room. “Sit.” He pointed to the chair in the corner. “NOW!” He grabbed her and threw her into in.
He pulled out a bag from his coat and opened it up. Inside were knives of all sorts from large ones to smaller narrower ones. He walked behind her and untied the rope. Kia felt the burn marks from where it’d hugged her face. She got enough courage to look at the man. He grabbed her head and tilted it back. “Shhhh,” he said. He softly stroked her hair. He let go and pulled open a drawer on the dresser. He pulled out red paint and finely painted her lips.
“P-p-please,” she stumbled through her tears. “D-d-don’t.”
He threw the bottle at her. “Isn’t this what you were paid to do?!” It hit her forehead and busted. Kia could feel blood mixing with the paint on her face. “You dirty the world!” He grabbed one of the largest knives in the bag and thrust himself at her. “And I’m going to fix that!”
And the last thing she remembered, was a sharp feeling in her chest and falling two stories down out a window.

I would appreciate it if someone told me how to purchase a wild cat. I tried RP ing not knowing that I needed one because whe nsomeone told me they said you don't have to if its free RP. I thought that that's what it was, but it wasn't and know it's locked and I need to purchase a lynx to unlock it. PLEASE HELP!

OCC: Ok. So you're just over throwing her. Thanks! :)

ummm...er...not OCC:

Starling turned to the cat that had brought her here. "What's going on? Who is this?"

Her jaws opened in awe. "You must never go hungry!" She looked in other directions as if confused on which way to go. "Where next? This place is so huge!"

I like all of the details that you put into describing the characters. It was like they were right infront of me! I liked everything except maybe that there wasn't a reaction from Kayla right after the bite. I absolutly LOVE everything else through, especially how you ended it with them going to the party. I know my critiques don't matter about the actual contest, but I figured that it always makes the writer feel good when someone has something good to say about their writing. :)

lol :) no prob. I know I don't get offended when people point out my mistakes because I know they're just trying to make my writing better. :/ I really don't get why people blow up on you by pointing out what needs work, as long as your not rude about it. (shrug) oh well.

I can't wait to read it!

"Oh." Owl was very curious. She'd never heard of the Tribe or a- "What's a prophecy?" Many other questions were also in there, like why the Clan didn't live in the forest up ahead. She figured that she'd wait to ask until she was in the camp's den. It must be huge! Image trying to fit tons of cats in one den!

Fox nodded in agreement, knowing what winter was like. "Are there any other good places for catching prey or climbing trees?" she asked. "I haven't been to all parts of the forest."

Starling had lost Darkstorm in the group of cats. They were larger than excpected. She hissed under her breath as she bumped into a wall and reopened one of her wounds. Where's there healer's den? she thought angrily.

ok, mine will be after I say this... Lisa I love ur story!
Here it is:

Kia walked into the dance club with her friend guiding her by her hand. Shana had heard about how bad her best friend was doing wit hmoney and promised to squeeze her into the job that she had. But, the job wasn’t like other jobs.
“Are you sure that this is okay? Your boss won’t get mad at me?” Kia was nervous. She kept worrying about joining the job as soon as Shana told her what it was. She shivered at the thought of undressing for money.
“Of course not!” Shana said playfully. “He’s always looking for more girls to make his club more popular.
They cut across the dance floor, weaving their way through the dancing bodies. They went into the back room and found a man sitting at his desk. He turned to Shana and smiled. “Is this her?” he asked, scanning Kia up and down.
“Yup,” she replied.
He nodded. “She’s fit for the job.” He turned to Kia. “You can lift yourself up on the poles, right?”
She nodded.
“Good. You can get her started. Remember, half your tips come to me.” They nodded and left.
They walked back into the main room and Kia finally realized how loud the music was. It blasted in her ears as she walked by Shana. Shana saw a man and pointed to him. “There’s your first customer,” she said smiling. He was a tall man, handsome. He had short brown hair and a glistening smile. His eyes were an ice blue and seemed to see right through you.
Kia took a deep breath and walked off to the man. She strutted her walk, trying to make herself more appealing and also trying to build confidence in herself. She leaned casually against the wall and faced him. “Hey there,” she said to him. “Do you come here much?”
He smiled when he looked at her. “No, it’s my first time coming here. I’m Jay, you?”
“Kia,” she replied. She smiled back, pleased that she’d caught his interest.
He put his arm around her and pointed to the back hall, where the exit was. “Mind if we go somewhere private.”
“‘Course not.” She walked with him, her heels clacking on the wood floor towards the back door. He held the door open for her and she walked out, making sure she kept her muscles tight to show them off. The wind blew slightly into the alley, making her shiver in her short skirt and belly tang-top.
He pulled out his wallet and slid a fifty into her hand. “Thanks,” she replied. She stuffed it in her shirt and then, before she knew it, her head smashed into the railing next to her.
Her eyes were wide with shock and she felt the forming of a bruise on her forehead. Her hair was pulled hard and she realized that he was pulling her by it. She was in the parking lot now and next to a small car. Still tugging on her hair, he opened a door and pulled out a coarse rope. “Jay, please, don-“her pleas were cut off as he wrapped in around her head.
The rope dung deeper into the skin around her mouth as the man tied it harder around her head. Kia’s eyes darted around in fright. She’d agreed to do one party to see if she liked the job, and now this happened. Her mascara ran down her face as her oily tears flooded her eyes. God help me, she prayed.
The man shoved her into his car and drove off. She bounced around in the trunk and banged her head harshly against the door when he hit a pot-hole. Her brown curls fell in front of her face when the car came to a sudden stop. When the trunk popped open, she was thrown out of in and landed harshly on a gravel drive. He grabbed her by her long hair and dragged her into a building.
She saw it was finely furnished, as if a wealthy person lived there. A man was at a front desk and her attacker walked up to him. “Room 26,” he said. “Clean up when I’m done.”
I’m going to die, I’m going to die. I’ll be raped and murdered in some sort of hotel for men to do as they please. Why? “Come here.” He pulled her hair harder and thrust her into the room. “Sit.” He pointed to the chair in the corner. “NOW!” He grabbed her and threw her into in.
He pulled out a bag from his coat and opened it up. Inside were knives of all sorts from large ones to smaller narrower ones. He walked behind her and untied the rope. Kia felt the burn marks from where it’d hugged her face. She got enough courage to look at the man. He grabbed her head and tilted it back. “Shhhh,” he said. He softly stroked her hair. He let go and pulled open a drawer on the dresser. He pulled out red paint and finely painted her lips.
“P-p-please,” she stumbled through her tears. “D-d-don’t.”
He threw the bottle at her. “Isn’t this what you were paid to do?!” It hit her forehead and busted. Kia could feel blood mixing with the paint on her face. “You dirty the world!” He grabbed one of the largest knives in the bag and thrust himself at her. “And I’m going to fix that!”
And the last thing she remembered was a sharp feeling in her chest and falling two stories down out a window.

Her mouth opened in awe and she looked across the moorland to the trees. She bolted off into the trees, loving the feeling of the wind through her pelt. She forced herself not to tire until she reached the tree line. The crunching of grass turned to leaves that lay on the forest floor. She didn't cease her pace and jumped onto a tree. She dug her claws in hard, not wanting to loose her grip. She bunched her muscles and began climbing until she reached the first branch, which seemed farther away now than what it did on the ground.

She cocked her head in confusion and curiousity. "Hmmmmm...sounds confusing. Do you get it Frostkit?" She surprized herself bytalking to the other kit as if she'd know her her whole life.

Fox felt herself grow hot with embarassment. She hopped down and looked at her paws nervously. "Uh, er, sorry. I haven't really had much fun climbing a tree in forever. I guess I just got carried away." She laughed nevously and padded slowly and more cautiously than before a head into the forest. "Are there any sources of water nearby like a stream of lake?"

"Well, I guess that it all depends. I mean, I was told to go to the Clan, and I didn't even know about the Tribe. I think that-I mean." She sighed in frustraition. "How far away is the Clan?" She thought that maybe if she like the Clan maybe she would stay there, but if they were mean to her- I'll just go with this nice she-cat if that happens,she thought.

Thanks you guys!

btw, I like your story Spark. I love the way you describe how fearless that Belle is and how Arthor crushes her spirit. The way you describe the smallest evil smile really makes it creepy. :) Good Luck!