Posts by alekazam6

Could I be Eyeless Jack?

Jane: jane yawns and slowly sits up, stretching out her arms. she clambered out of bed, went to her cupboard and grabbed out a cute, black, lace dress. she puts it on and trots out her door, heading toward the stairs. then she sees sally, sitting on the stairs with food around her...
"hey sally? what's wrong? are you ok?" she asks kindly as she sits next to her.

Could I join?

Would I be able to join?

Jane sits down beside Sally and lovingly hooks are arm around her shoulder.
"It's ok, the mess, I mean, I can clean it up later." she says quietly. "But does you leg hurt? it doesn't look too healthy..." she adds looking at her knee.

OOC: Your Sally is 11 right? Btw, my Jane is 14.

Jane pulls her into a close hug and softly strokes her hair.
"You'll be ok... Now, let's go get you to Slendy, he'll fix you up." She says as she carefully stands and pulls Sally to her feet, trying to support her weight.

This is really awesome so far! I can see how much you and your friend have been working on it. just a few things. What are they? I can tell Tiger is either a feline or canine (or, dare I say it, tiger) but what about everyone else? are they humans or animals? I fell that the part where Masky attacked Zalgo could have used some more explaining, so maybe adding a bit in about how Zalgo reacted? Also, I'm assuming this whole scene (including when tiger went to hers/Jeff's room) is about 3 minutes long, yet it takes me only 1 minute to read, if you added in more details to what's happening, how everyone's speaking (if they're exited, angry, annoyed ect), where they all are and other little things like that. One last thing, I noticed some grammar mistakes but they're not very noticeable.

Overall, a very good start to a wonderful story! keep writing and posting for us!

~ Aleka

Jeff yawned and burst through the door to the room he and Ben shared.
"Hey dude, watcha' doing?" He asked as he walked up to Ben and leaned against the back of his chair.

Could I join?

"oh. good morning, yes, could you please get the first aid kit from the kitchen and bring it to slendy's room?" Jane asks politely, not knowing who these people were.

could I please be Death the Kid??? also are the MLP characters open?

Could I be Pinkie?

Nighttrace, a dark red coated and navi blue maned alicorn, giggled maniacally before rising out of her crouching passion in front of Chronos.
"Hello there..."

OOC: Nighttrace is a power hungry and delusional alicorn who thinks she is the princess of equestria. she also has large bat wings and sharp canine teeth.

Username: Alekazam6
Name: Lilly Rose
Age: 10 (very late bloomer)
Personality: Caring, outgoing and happy
Looks: Pegasus. Long dark red mane that reaches to the ground and a navi blue coat.
Cutie Mark/Future Cutie Mark: A vase with a single rose in it, meaning she'll be a florist of some sort.

Could I also be Scootaloo?

"Oh, c'mon! tell me!" Jeff whined, trying to annoy Ben and grinning his evil grin.

Nighttrace laughed evilly and spoke with a load Canterlot voice. "My name is Nighttrace, subject! And who might you be?" She asks, moving closer to Chronos and smiles, making sure to let the new pony see her sharp teeth.

OOC: lol :P

IC: "ohh! yay! today's the day! the new student is here!" Pinkie Pie, the exited party animal, squees to as many people as she can around the lunch hall, making most a little uncomfortable.

"Oh c'mon, dude! Lemme see!" Jeff whines as he leans over the chair and pulls up BEN's internet search history.

"come out, now! I will not tolerate hidden foes!" Nighttrace warns with a small growl and a ferocious snarl.

Name: Pinkie Pie
Age: 15
Pony or tribute: Pony
Looks:
New charrie?: nope
Other: chimichonga