Posts by :.DarkMist.:

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I'll join! I can't make my character forms atm but I'll make them later.

Name: Falconwing
Gender: Tom
Picture: I can't post pictures on my iPad, sorry.
Written description: Falconwing is muscular and strong. His pelt is a dark brown and he has piercing amber eyes.
Age: 15 moons
Rank: Warrior
History: Falconwing's father died when he was just a kit. His father was a great warrior though, and he took aa loot of his traits. His only brother, Brackenpelt, left the Clan to join a different one with his mate and kits.
Crush: No
Mate: Nope
Kits: None
Other:

Name: Mistpaw
Gender: She-cat
Picture: Sorry I can't post pictures on my iPad
Written description: Mistpaw is small and slender. She is a silver tabby with, huge amber eyes.
Age: 6 moons
Rank: Apprentice
History: Mistpaw is the runt of the litter. Her mother had 4 kits and she was the last born. All her siblings were solid grey but her.
Crush: No
Mate: Too young
Kits: Too young
Other:

Ok

Silentsong opened her eyes. Light from the sun crept into her view. She stretched and then padded out of the warriors' den. All was quiet in the camp. Dew still lined the grass. It was early and most cats were sleeping, but not Silentsong. She got up early to sneak out. She took one more glance around camp and then silently walked out of camp.

"Ok. I can go get some moss." Destiny said as she looked to where he was pointing.

Ok, thanks for helping. Do you mind if I give you one more improved rp sample?

Could you help me? :3

Screen Name: :.DarkMist.:
When are you mostly on: ON the weekends I'm almos always on. I have eastern time so on the weekdays I'll be on anywhere from 3:30 PM to around 10:00 PM
Rp sample: Moonlight opened her emerald eyes. Light began to enter her view. She got up and yawned. Dew linned the cold ground. Her pads felt cold against the grass. The dawn sunlight made her black pelt have a shinning appearance. Camp was busy. Every cat seemed to be doing something but her.
What I want help with: Being more detailed and being able to make longer posts. Sometimes I just don't know what to post.
Other: Are you still accepting?

Yep.

"Ok." she said as she ran off to gather moss.

For me it's pretty good. xD
I think I could have described the scene better though. I just run out of adjectives to use and such. I have the scene pictured I just don't really know how to describe it all. If that makes any sense. :P

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NightClan

Territory: NightClan lives in a forest. There's mostly oak and pine trees in the forest.
Prey: They mostly eat birds, mice, voles, and adders.

[size=36pt]Rules[/size]
1. No power playing or god modding.
2. No auto hitting.

Character form

Name:
Gender:
Age:
Wanted Rank:
Appearance:
Personality:
History:
Mate:
Kits:
Crush:
Other:

My characters

Name: Ashstar
Gender: Tom
Age: 25 moons
Rank: Leader
Appearance: Ashstar is dark grey with black specks. His eyes are a piercing green.
Personality: Ashstar is mostly calm. Few things can make him angry. At times he can be too serious.
History: Ashstar's destiny was always to become leader of NightClan. As a kit, he was always the strongest in the nursery. When he finally became an apprentice, it didn't take him long to become a warrior. At the age of 10 moons he was a warrior. And soon enough he became deputy.
Mate: No
Kits: None
Crush: Nope
Other: Ashstar has one long scar on his shoulder that he doesn't like to talk about.

Name: Sweetpaw
Gender: She-cat
Age: 7 moons
Rank: Apprentice
Appearance: Sweetpaw is tortoiseshell with a white front paw. Her eyes are a huge, bold, golden amber.
Personality: Sweetpaw gets impressed easily. She can say too much at times and she has a smart mouth. Most of the time though, she is very sweet and caring.
History: Sweetpaw was always the weakest in the nursery. She was always picked on because of her smaller size. Even if she was the one being picked on, she got in trouble for being what the queens called 'mean' to the other kits.
Mate: Too young
Kits: Too young
Crush: No
Other: Hawkpaw is Sweetpaw's missing brother.

Name: Hawkpaw
Gender: Tom
Age: 7 moons
Rank: Apprentice
Appearance: Hawkpaw is a golden brown tabby Tom. He has gentle, calm, amber eyes and long, sharp, pointed claws.
Personality: Hawkpaw is always nice and enthusiastic. He can get a little annoying but her knows when to stop talking. At times he just goes with what happens and it can appear that he doesn't have a care in the world.
History: Hawkpaw grew up in NightClan. His father went missing but all his siblings are still alive. His mother left the Clan and never came back.
Mate: Too young
Kits: Too young
Crush: No
Other: Sweetpaw is his missing sister.

I try to have good grammar but sometimes I make a few mistakes. And a few of my sentences needed more detail.

I g2g for today but I'll be on tomorrow. Hopefully.

Frostpaw looked at the freshkill pile. One of her best friends were over there. She got up and a snowflake hit her nose. She shivered but did her best to ignore the other snowflakes that were falling. Once she reached the freshkill pile, she sat down next to it and looked at her friend.

They basically mean you can heal your character when they get hurt, if someone hits your character they have to react to it, your character can't be very powerful and hit their opponent each time, and you can't just hit someone when your in a rp fight. I'll give you a good and bad example.
Bad: Frostpaw hit Blacknight sending him flying.
Good: Frostpaw tried to hit Blacknight to send him flying.
So in the good example they have a chance to deny the attack.
Other than that your accepted. :3

Destiny looked around. She saw some moss by a tree.Quickly, she ran over to it and picked it up in her mouth.

I see. So I have to use more adjectives to describe it? :3

Ok.

Rosefall looked around camp, her sapphire blue eyes had a glow to them. A thin blanket of leaves were on the ground. So much was going on. It was chaos. Everyone was preparing for leaf-fall which was just around the corner. Rosefall was just standing there, blank eyed. Suddenly, she felt someones breath one her. "Care to help?" It was the deputy. His long, black, pelt puffed out as he stood there, looking her straight in the eyes. "Um... yeah. I was just going to go hunt." She made up a quick excuse off the top of her head. SHe heard the deputy snort and then she was gone.

Better?

No :3 let's wait a little longer before we rp.

Ok so make sure I describe the scene as if I was there?

Shysong quickly ran through the forest. A bundle of herbs hanging from her jaws, she sat down at the entrance of camp. "Hi Shysong." A voice said. The voice could only belong to the leader of TwistedClan, Timberstar. "How are you?" The large, muscular, brown leader asked. "Fine." Shysong replied as she looked at him right in the eyes.