Pokemon-Sonic Crossover Story(plz review)

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    Prologue
    "Wake up." A young Eevee said, shaking an unconscious Riolu with one paw. She blinked at him. "C'mon, get up." The air was quiet, with the exception of the waves lapping at the shore nearby in a constant motion like a cat licking a bowl clean. The Eevee whimpered. "Wakey wakey. Please, get up." Finally, the Riolu jerked up as if snapping out of a trance. "What-where-how-" He trailed off when he noticed his fur. Confused, he looked in the water nearby with a gasp. "You're funny. I'm Eevee, by the way, what's your name?" She chirped happily, completely unaware of his shock. The Riolu looked at her as he stood up. "Samuel." Eevee nodded, though she thought the name was weird, then turned around. A little Zorua ran over. He stared up at them with wide, innocent eyes. "Pwease help me. My bestest friend is twapped in thewe." While Samuel was trying to piece everything together, the Eevee declared "Of course! We'll help." Samuel blinked. "Wait-what do you mean, we-" The Zorua sniffled, his eyes filling with tears. "You won't help me?" Eevee put a paw over Samuel's mouth to shut him up. "We will." Suddenly, the Pokemon dragged her new found partner into the cave nearby known as Beach Cave. When they left, the Zorua sneered to himself cockily. "They fell for it! Now all I have to do is guarantee that Samuel won't come back out.." His eyes flashed as he used a paw to flip his red sunglasses onto his face. "..Alive."

    [fancypost bgcolor= navy bordercolor= yellow Borderwidth=8px][i]Oliver Vocaloid



    I am one of the ignored Vocaloids.


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    An Absol trotted onto the beach, "Scourge, what are you laughing about?" she questioned.


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    No one really notices me...


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    Scourge rolled his eyes to the sky. "Nothing." He lied, watching them leave.
    Samuel and Eevee ran into Beach Cave.

    [fancypost bgcolor= navy bordercolor= yellow Borderwidth=8px][i]Oliver Vocaloid



    I am one of the ignored Vocaloids.


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    "You sure?" she said, "I could hear your evil laugh from Treasure Town." she teased. "Anyway, I'm heading after the two... CLEANING UP YOUR MESS." she raced down Beach Cave after the two.


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    Scourge growled and chased after her.
    Samuel and Eevee were on the final floor, looking around.
    Scourge used his orb to get to the last floor. He smirked. "I have you now.." He growled, preparing to spring at them.

    [fancypost bgcolor= navy bordercolor= yellow Borderwidth=8px][i]Oliver Vocaloid



    I am one of the ignored Vocaloids.


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    Platinum came dashing to the last floor. "Scourge! Where the heck are you?" she snarled, defeating enemy pokemon in her way for looking for the Zorua.


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    Scourge hid in the shadows, smirking to himself.
    Samuel and Eevee gazed around. Samuel blinked at Platinum. "Wait-Scourge is here? Damn, I shoulda known he'd be here, to." He mused, looking for him.

    [fancypost bgcolor= navy bordercolor= yellow Borderwidth=8px][i]Oliver Vocaloid I am one of the ignored Vocaloids. ___________________________________________________________ [b][size=15pt] Occ #1: Ic:
    "See a Zorua?" she questioned, "He was Scourge..."
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    Samuel shook his head. "No.."
    Scourge made his way towards them, smirking.
    Eevee squeaked in fear.

    [fancypost bgcolor= navy bordercolor= yellow Borderwidth=8px][i]Oliver Vocaloid I am one of the ignored Vocaloids. ___________________________________________________________ [b][size=15pt] Occ #1: Ic:
    "He's the a$$ who sent you in here, man." Platinum replied, doing a face-paw.
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    Samuel face-pawed. "I am so stupid."
    Scourge used Double Team, then Fire Fang.
    Samuel was hit by the unexpected attack, and sustained a burn. He stood up, smiling crookedly. He waited for the burn to inflict damage on him enough so he could use Counter to deal damage back to Scourge.
    Eevee was sent flying. She landed on all fours, but took a considerable amount of damage. Annoyed, she used Tail Whip to hit Scourge in the face.
    Scourge glared at her and seized her tail in his teeth, growling.

    [fancypost bgcolor= navy bordercolor= yellow Borderwidth=8px][i]Oliver Vocaloid I am one of the ignored Vocaloids. ___________________________________________________________ [b][size=15pt] Occ #1: Ic:
    Platinum used Shadow Ball, aiming it at Samuel. She also got ready to use Perish Song.
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    Samuel let himself be hit, then used Counter on Scourge.
    Scourge fell onto the ground and looked close to fainting.

    [fancypost bgcolor= navy bordercolor= yellow Borderwidth=8px][i]Oliver Vocaloid I am one of the ignored Vocaloids. ___________________________________________________________ [b][size=15pt] Occ #1: Ic: Instead of Preish Song, she used Pycho Cut. Occ #2: [/size]__________________________________________________ No one really notices me... Songs:

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    Scourge was flung into a wall from Psycho Cut, fainting instantly.
    Samuel smiled at Platinum "Thanks for the help."
    Eevee stood up weakly, looking faint. "There's a Guild nearby. We can stay there. You guys in?" She chirped, wagging her tail.

    [fancypost bgcolor= black bordercolor= red Borderwidth=8px][i]Garry Oh, my jacket... ___________________________________________________________ [b][size=15pt] Occ #1: Ic:
    "No probz." Platinum replied to Samuel, then looked at the eevee, "Eh, wouldn't hurt." she replied. The absol looked at Samuel, "You in?"
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    Samuel nodded. "Yeah."
    Eevee wagged her tail. "Okay! I'll lead you there." She led them out of the dungeon through a large gap in the wall, then headed towards the Guild.
    When they reached the Guild, it was revealed to look like a giant Wigglytuff head with the door being the mouth. There was a grate on the floor in front of the Guild. Eevee ran over and stepped on it.
    (If you want, you can do the Pokemon detected thingy XD
    I'm on the last chapter of Explorers of Sky. Boo to the ya. *starts dancing*)

    [fancypost bgcolor= black bordercolor= red Borderwidth=8px][i]Garry Oh, my jacket... ___________________________________________________________ [b][size=15pt] Occ #1:
    *growls at you*
    Ic:
    Platinum waited a little.


    "POKEMON DETECTED! POKEMON DETECTED!"
    "Who is it? Who is it?"
    "Eevee! Eevee's here!"
    "Welcome in, stranger!"
    The gate opened.
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    (*stops dancing* What's wrong? Why chu growl at me? *confused head-tilt*)
    Eevee smiled, though a bit rattled, then walked into Guild.
    Samuel looked at Platinum. "Ladies first." He said, blushing a little.

    [fancypost bgcolor= black bordercolor= red Borderwidth=8px][i]Garry Oh, my jacket... ___________________________________________________________ [b][size=15pt] Occ #1:
    1) I lost that game
    2) I can't outrun Dusclops's men...
    Ic: Occ #2:     [/size]__________________________________________________ Look inside the pocket... [align=center][color=black]© Hawkeye Crazy!!!