Dragonclaw of Thunderclan

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  • Character Name: Dragonclaw


    Character Age:18 moons


    Gender: she-cat


    Alliance:Thunderclan


    Rank:Warrior


    Appearance (6 or more sentences):She has unusually long and sharp claws and is a blue tabby with the purest white paws. She also has a white tail tip that has longer fur than the rest of her body. There is a long white strip that starts at the base of her neck and ends near the base of her tail. Her eyes are a pretty blue green turquoise and one black front paw. She is well muscled, but lithe and streamlined for running long distances. She is not super large or super small, but just about perfect.


    Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below. Those are additional requirements): Dragonclaw always fights to the best of her abilities at all times during a battle. She is always loyal to her clan first, and fights to the death to protect her clanmates. Dragonclaw loves to help other cats whenever she can, in and out of the camp. She values the Warrior Code above everything and defends it strongly. She is normally very peppy and pleasant to be around most of the time. Dragonclaw hates kittypets and their easy, plump life, and the way there can just go back to their twolegs if life gets rough.
    ---Likes (at least 3):Dragonclaw likes hunting at night, sharing prey with her mate, and fighting off trespassers.
    --- Dislikes (at least 3):Shadowclan, being wet, and kittypets.
    ---Strengths (No MORE than 5):Her long claws, strong front legs, and a strong sense of justice.
    ---Weaknesses (At least 3):Her defenses are weaker than her attacks, she values friendship, and she likes to hunt at night.
    History (8 or more sentences): Dragonclaw has a mate, Moonshard, a silver and blue Calico tom. Dragonclaw's mentor was Darktail, a dark tabby she-cat with yollow eyes. Her brothers Redstorm and Firetail were killed when Shadowclan were caught stealing prey from Thunderclan. Redstorm and Firetail are red tabbies, and Firetail has large white spots all over him. She has fought in many battles in every territory side by side with Moonshard. She has never mothered Moonshard's kits, and doesn't plan to. She never brags about her skills or pretends to be greater than anyone else.


    Roleplay Sample (Required for first advanced bio):Dragonclaw padded through the forest, searching for prey in the middle of the night. She loved all the shadows the moon cast around her and the forest. A twig snapped, and Dragonclaw crept through the ferns and undergrowth to the source of the noise, her ears pricked and eyes gleaming. As she got closer to the animal, a rank scent rose to her nose. Dragonclaw's eyes widened in surprise. It was a badger!


    Comments (optional):


  • Close, I like it so far!
    -Remember that Tigerstar never existed here; this is an alternate universe.
    -Grammar mistakes would need to be fixed. :-)
    -You must lengthen your sentences; advanced. :-)

  • You still have grammar mistakes and need to lengthen your sentences. :-)

  • Your sentences are still incredibly short. I'd suggest combining multiple sentences into one compound sentence, or adding adjectives to make the sentence more descriptive.


    If you need any help doing so, feel free to ask.


  • Hey there, I don't think you're quite ready for advanced role playing. Try checking out this board and picking up some tips and tricks;
    http://warriorcatsrpg.com/index.php?board=649.0
    Locking and moving to "Create a Cat", PM me with any questions!