Sunblaze of Fallenclan

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  • Character Name: Sunblaze


    Character Age: 24 moons


    Gender: she-cat


    Alliance: Fallenclan


    Rank: Warrior


    Appearance (6 or more sentences): Sunblaze is a beautiful flame-color and has golden flecks and paws. She has deep and dark blue eyes that are ringed in a light green. Her legs are especially long and tall, due to her Fernclan heritage. She also has an old and small scar going over one eye, caused by a fight with a DiamondRockClan cat. Her claws are very strong and large, almost resembling a wild cat's, once again caused by her parents. The last important physical feature that you need to know about Sunblaze is that she has a very muscular body but is small also, and has the perfect light pelt for swimming.


    Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below. Those are additional requirements): Sunblaze is an extremly loyal cat, she would die before those she loved were hurt. She also seems to have amazing battle skills, and launches into battle without hesitation, all of the kits are told stories of her unbelievable triumphs in battle. She would never start a battle that was unjust though, she is quite noble. She is also very kind and sweet, smiling at every chance. One of her flaws though is how trusting she can be, believing any cat who tells her that they will stand by her, and any tom who says he loves her. She is protective of her entire clan, but she seems to have a certain love for kits, apprentices, and elders, spending her free time entertaining them. She is as curious as a kit and would explore every stray scent or sound if she could, which leads her into a fair amount of danger and trouble. The last thing you must know about Sunblaze is how restless she is, while the other warriors gladly lay in the sun relaxing she is always itching to explore and play.
    ---Likes (at least 3): Young and old cats, swimming, going for runs, fighting
    --- Dislikes (at least 3): Being stuck in camp, DiamondRockClan, cruelty towards cats who can't fight for themselves, foxes
    ---Strengths (No MORE than 5): Swimming, Fighting, Tree-climbing, and her smarts
    ---Weaknesses (At least 3): Bad judge of character, curiousity, believes cats too easily


    History (8 or more sentences): Sunblaze was born into Fernclan along with her sisters Mapletail and Moonleaf. Their mother seemed to hate them, investing every moment of her time in their older brother Stormfoot, Stormpaw at the time of their birth. Their father and other clanmates noticed their neglect and told her mother of what she was doing, she then accused their father of turning on her and he told her they were no longer mates. The sisters of course blamed themselves, sadly her mother thought the same and informed them she was moving back to the warriors den, even though they were hust four moths old. Their kinder aunt took them in and raised them, treating them like they were her own children and loved them dearly. They grew into fine warriors, Moonleaf taking on the role of medicine cat. Sunblaze fell in love with a young tom and he fathered her two kits, days after they were born he informed her he had fallen in love with another she-cat and left Sunblaze. She stopped eating and her kits died, the only thing that kept her alive was her sister continuosly forcing her to eat and move, after moons of despair, she finally accepted her losses and moved on. Mapletail seemed to grow apart from Moonleaf and Sunblaze as the seasons past, until one night she rushed them out of camp. She brought them to the dead body of the tom who had broken Sunblaze's heart, she explained that she was the cat he'd fallen in love with and had secretly fathered her single kit, he took her kit and ran in the night. He had come back moons later and told her that her only kit had died, diving to a rage she killed him. The three sisters agreed that no cat could know and fled into the forest outside of their territory. The lived for about a moon as loners, until they decided to split up and find clans, Sunblaze left her sisters with heavy heart and soon found Fallenclan. She didn't tell any cat of her past and still hasn't.


    Roleplay Sample (Required for first advanced bio): Sunblaze ran across the battlefield, cats fighting on every side. She lept onto a boulder and surveyed the field in which the two clans were battling, searching for her next opponent, her eyes lit up when she found him: broad-shouldered and dappled with the bright red blood of the she-cat who had just ran from the clearing howling in pain. Without hesitation the young she-cat launched herself onto the toms back and felt her claws dig into his shoulders. The tom let out a suprised hiss, bu regained his composure and began to jump wildly, he flung Sunblaze from his back and sent her skidding to a halt on the ground, she looked up at him, anger and determination burning in her icy gaze and jumped at him again. She swiped one paw below his jaw, sending him jumping upward into her golden paw, which had been placed skillfully above him, and slammed his head against the hard ground with a sickening thump, he cried out in pain and fled the clearing "Moonclan! Retreat!" he called as he ran, all of the eyes in the clearing latched onto Sunblaze as she realized she had defeated the feared Moonclan leader.


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    The post was edited 1 time, last by ~Simbablaze~ ().


  • Hey there! I like your bio; there are some issues though.
    -Some choppy sentences need to be lengthened.
    -Also, unless your cat actually killed a leader, you can't say that they did in the role play sample; besides, killing another cat without their permission.


  • Your sentences in appearance are still choppy :-)


  • Have you fixed this yet? If not, I see you use 'she' a lot when explaining her appearance. Try using her name, or some other form of explaining like 'the she-cat'.


    Bump when finished!


  • You use 'she' as a starter for a sentence four times out of the six when explaining appearance, try using something else. Her name, for example. :)


    Bump when edited, please.


  • Great, accepted! :D