Z Private Tutoring with Memory

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  • Great! I'm going to teach you:
    1) 'Sophisticated' Fancyposts
    I'll give you a few tips on making your fancyposts looking more professional and the placements of certain elements in your fancyposts. I'll also throw in a few of the templates that I find useful.
    2) Color on Color Techniques
    I'll give you hints on what colors and what palettes go well together. This will help you make your fancyposts appear more 'in touch'.
    3) Human Feelings and Personality in Writing
    We'll start with this one, since I've got the lesson plan already charted out. I'll give you some tips on personality types and how to draw them back to the character when you're writing. You know, how to keep it on the paper and not draw off the page.
    4) 'Simple' Style
    I'll show you the 'simple' style of writing in which you make it easier to understand and even add a slightly poetic element to it. This form of writing is greatly used when a character has memory loss, a mental condition, riveting anger, and honestly...you can fit it into many more things.


    If there's anything else that you'd like me to teach you, I'd be glad to!
    So, once you give the 'I'm here' I'll start with #3.

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  • Great, let's start with this:


    Alright, let's say that there are six different 'main' human emotions.
    These would be:
    1) Fear
    2) Joy
    3) Love
    4) Sadness
    5) Surprise
    6) Anger


    Now, these emotions can also be described or felt in different ways. Let us begin with the first one, fear. Fear can be introduced in your writing in many ways. For example, a character can be extremely afraid of everything, or then can be afraid of practically nothing. Mostly, character are located in the middle. Though, it is sometimes fun to play a character who 'appears' to be afraid of nothing or a character who 'appears' to be afraid of everything.


    See, fear is an inner thing. Yet, it can still be obvious when someone is afraid.
    Some examples of displaying fear in a secluded way could be like this:


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    [color=white][font=georgia]Rhodo kept her dainty pale chin held high in the air and her hands placed firmly on her hips. She took a small glance at the moving bush behind her but whipped her head about as to face the opposite direction. After all, she was a girl of bravery, a rustling bush didn't scare her, not a noticeable amount at least.

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    Now, you could also show fear in an extremely visible manner:


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    [color=white][font=georgia]Rhodo eyed the bush, fear stretched across her face. She brushed her long curly red hair out of her face and jumped back as the bush shook again. "S..show yourself." She said, trembling in front of the unrevealed presence.

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    Mostly, characters may be like this in such a situation:


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    [color=white][font=georgia]The red head turned her head alertly as the bush nearby trembled. She forced a small laugh but backed away slightly, she locked her hand in her boyfriends and turned to look into his eyes. "What do you suppose is making that noise?" Rhodo asked, her body was still and cautious, waiting for the unknown to show itself to her.

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    Alright, now see if you can right about fear in these three ways with your own character and a new situation.

  • No way she was scared of snakes. She wasn't scared of anything. Yet those beady black eyes felt sort of menacing to Emily, combined with the long, winding body covered with scales. Each time it moved, her heart pumped faster. The sixteen-year old didn't like how pale her skin was, and how stiff her body became. Casting her gaze away from the snake and setting her jaw, she walked right by, pretending not to notice it. It was just a snake. Gosh.


    Oh no, not again. The brunette backed away from the snake, arms shaking. "Daniel?" she called, trying to keep her voice calm and level. Another snake? Emily didn't like to admit it, but she was scared to death by them. Venom that could kill in minutes and razor-sharp teeth? The sixteen year old jumped as the snake slithered across the path, spotting at a bush near her. "DANIEL!" she shrieked again, frozen in place. A wave on nausea hit her, and she took another shaky step back.


    Gads, that scared her! Emily had spotted a snake, curled up in the grass. With a shaky laugh, she stumbled unsteady to her older brother. "Daniel, there's a snake there." she told him, putting her hands in her pockets in an attempt to stop them from shaking. She hoped he couldn't see that she was pale.

  • Wonderful! Now, let us move on to the two sub-categories of 'fear'. The first category is 'nervousness' which has tertiary categories of its own. These tertiary categories are:
    anxiety
    apprehension
    distress
    dread
    tenseness
    uneasiness
    worry


    Now, choose one of them and write another short paragraph about it.


    My example:
    [fancypost bgcolor=white; border-top: 2px dashed black; border-left: 2px dashed black; border-bottom: 2px dashed black; border-right: 2px dashed black; border-radius: 50px; font-family: georgia; color: #0073ff; text-align: center]The messy red head paced back and fourth outside of the principal's office. She looked like she was going to hurl, her face was pale and she was drenched in sweat. When the door opened and a blonde women stood frowning in the entrance, the girl went stiff as a board, though her complexion remained the same. "Rhodo, we need to talk." The lady replied formally, a frown on her face.[/fancypost]

  • Lol, yes. They are all under the same category.
    But they are expressed in different ways.


    Now, let's move on to the 'joy' category.
    Writing a paragraph where a character is happy or 'joyful'.


    Example;
    Miranda beamed at the glorious sight of her birthday cake. The cake was chocolate with delicate white frosting covering it in smooth layers. Small white puffs of whipped cream bordered the sides of the cake, adding to it a sophisticated yet happy actualization. The brown haired girl turned to hug her mother and shout a word of thanks to everyone at the party. She truly was in a blithesome mood.

  • No way.


    Straight A's? STRAIGHT A's? Kyle bend over his mother's shoulder and stared down at the report card. A for math? A- for science? Suddenly, the fourteen year old let out a whoop, and ripped the report out of his mother's hands, doing a crazy dance and kissing the paper. His mother was staring at him, but right now, he really didn't care. Really, they were all A's, why would he care?

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    ¿suoıɹuɔ[fancyimage]http://i.imgur.com/SE6yL.png[/fancyimage]Wonderful, now we can move on to the 'love' category. That one's a little bit more complicated. It can mean dedicated love, unsure love, forbidden love, mixed love, etc. There are several ways you can write this one. So, how about you just write a few sentences for each where a character either confesses their love to another or doesn't confess at all. The most simple of these would be "I love you." Which, is a good basic. But you can also spice it up. Try giving it a little 'jazz'.
    [fancyimage]http://i.imgur.com/SE6yL.png[/fancyimage]curious?

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  • ooc; Here's something I noticed- it shares a lot of features with fear. 8D


    Sitting there on the park bench in the fading light, Ivan couldn't help but look at Sophia, who was sitting beside him and enjoying the music of a band playing 'I wish you a Merry Christmas'. "Hey," Ivan's head jerked up at her voice, "want to go inside? It's pretty cold." Ivan nodded, and stood up, starting to walk towards the empty church. He noticed that his hand was entwined with hers, and that his heart was fluttering in his chest, his stomach tying itself into knots. Once inside, Ivan suddenly remarked how pretty the church actually was, with it's stained glass windows, it's gold crosses, it's mistletoe...


    Wait, mistletoe?


    Looking up as if to check his eyes, the fourteen-year old confirmed what he thought; a bunch of mistletoe hung over them. Looking down to Sophia, he noted she was thinking exactly the same thing. Their eyes met, and Ivan felt his breath catch, his heart almost stopping. Sophia smiled slightly, then leaned forward on her tiptoes and pressed her lips against his. "Merry Christmas." she whispered, lips against his, and Ivan couldn't resist a smile.


    ooc; I'm Jewish, so please don't blame me if I got any church details wrong. ;)

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    ¿suoıɹuɔ[fancyimage]http://i.imgur.com/SE6yL.png[/fancyimage]That was great! You really caught the reader with the 'mistletoe' statement added into it. I also liked how you make the writing style second person so that you could reference to all the characters by name, yet you still only knew what one of the characters was thinking or feeling. Using that type of writing style adds a hidden mystery to your writing as well. Good work!


    I'm Atheist, so I wouldn't even know if you got the church details right or wrong.
    [fancyimage]http://i.imgur.com/SE6yL.png[/fancyimage]curious?

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  • <3 Thank you! I use second person more than first, but I never thought about it that way. It was easier to write it, I guess. ^^


    What's next? :)

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    ¿suoıɹuɔ[fancyimage]http://i.imgur.com/SE6yL.png[/fancyimage]Since I'm the tutor here, I couldn't help but point out a grammar mistake in your response. I know we're not necessarily talking about such, but it could help you in your further writings.


    You said: "It was more easier to write it, I guess."
    In a situation like such, you don't include 'more'.
    So correct grammar would be: "It was easier to write it, I guess."

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  • Oh yeah! Wow, I don't usually do that, but my sister does. And I think it's starting to leak into my mind. D8


    Or I was going to write something with more and didn't erase it. :P


    Changed~

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    ¿suoıɹuɔ[fancyimage]http://i.imgur.com/SE6yL.png[/fancyimage]Yeah, I'm a bit picky about stuff like that. XD
    Anywho, let's get to work on #4, sadness. Sadness can also be an important part of the other feelings. So, try to write something sad that may make the reader feel sympathy for the character. Now, this is harder to do right off the bat and normally cannot be performed correctly unless the reader has backup on the character.

    [fancyimage]http://i.imgur.com/SE6yL.png[/fancyimage]curious?

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  • The machines looked so out of place, their wires and taps all connecting to her boyfriend's skin. His hands were shaking in hers, his eyes where all black, shallow and non-seeing. Lily's breath shook as Michael's hand reached forward and stroked her cheeks, wiping a tear away. A long silence followed, the young couple gazing in each other's eyes. No, Lily couldn't believe it. Michael wasn't dying; this was all a dream, a nightmare. Yet when she opened her eyes, the pulse measurer was still displaying a fading heartbeat, and her boyfriend was still lying there. "Don't leave me," the girl managed to whimper, her hand reaching forward and tracing his chin gently with her finger, "You promised to be there." The young man managed a smile, and he shook his head. "[b Smile, you look so much better.[/b]" was his reply, the smile fading at her touch. The seventeen year old girl put on a watery smile; the best the teen could manage. Michael's hand stroked her hands carefully, then entwining his hands with hers. His pulse was fading fast, and he gestured for her to lean forward. The girl did, putting her ear to his lips, biting back a sob. She would never forget those last words. Time seemed to slow down as he said, "I love you."


    Then, his hand dropped from hers, his body becoming limp. The faint light in his eyes faded, and the machine let out a long, unbreaking alarm noise, the line becoming flat. Lily's chin wobbling, and a sob escaped, his last words echoing in her mind, his black eyes coming to her when she blinked. "I love you, too." the seventeen year old brunette whispered, her vision becoming blurred by the tears in her eyes.

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    Gosh, Memory! I didn't have any background of the characters once so ever, yet, I still almost cried. Brilliantly done! You've obviously got the 'love' category handled greatly! We've also pretty much covered the two other categories earlier: sadness and surprise. So, let's move on to the last one: anger.


    [size=9pt]- Curiosity Curious[/size]

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    You know, I think you've completed your training in these different 'elements' of writings. Honestly, your writing is just as good as mine. If there was anything I needed to teach you, then I think I've already covered it. XD


    [size=9pt]- Curiosity Curious[/size]

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  • [font=georgia]Do you ever get 'stuck' when you're posting? Like, get lost?


    Sometimes I do that, and I'm just relieved to actually post, and when I look at it later I can't believe I posted that- it was cheesy. Like the 'love' roleplaying post I threw there.


    This, for example, is one of my super advanced posts I attempted using your teachings. The parts I find a bit desperate are in red, so could you glance through it? Or am I just being paranoid?


    {Yes, this is Percy Jackson. <3}