Embertear's Advanced Bio

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Character Name:Embertear

Character Age:36 moons

Gender:She-cat

Alliance:ThunderClan

Rank:Medicine Cat/Warrior (Depends on the type of thread)

Appearance (6 or more sentences):Embertear is a large maine coon she-cat with black and orange fur. Her fur is very long and fluffy and her body structure is naturally large. She walks with an elegance that flaunts her fur. Her legs and tail are long and her tail has a large flourish of fur at the tip. Embertear's underbelly and paws are all white. Her eyes are an icy blue that are very piercing. Her muzzle is sharp and her whiskers are long. Her nose is a nice pinkish color.

Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below. Those are additional requirements): Embertear is quite kind. She can be very helpful and loving towards her fellow clanmates. She will be delightfully pleasant when she greets her friends and is not harsh on her enemies. She always keeps her head up and can come off as a powerful being. She tries to return rudeness with kindness and she believes in peace rather than fighting to solve problems. Embertear will listen to other cat's problems, no matter how personal, and will try to give her honest opinion no matter what. Over all she is a nice she-cat with a big heart.

---Likes (at least 3):She likes to take walks in the forest, help other cats, and she LOVES voles
--- Dislikes (at least 3):She does not like fighting, rude cats, and fish
---Strengths (No MORE than 5):She is a pretty fast runner and is best at hunting prey on the ground.
---Weaknesses (At least 3):She is not a good fighter and is terrible at fishing. She can sometimes be 'too nice' and can not accept that some cats are just evil and can not be changed.

History (8 or more sentences):Embertear's mother and father were both kittypets. She was born a kittypet in the winter with two other siblings. Because of the harsh weather conditions, her brothers, Ash and Blaze, died when they were 1 moon. She lived with her mother until she was about 7 moons but hated the kittypet life. She wanted go out and explore. So she escaped from her twolegs and lived in the forest as a loner until she was about 12 moons. Then she found Thunderclan and joined it. She trained as an apprentice under Crystalstep(warrior or medicine cat, whichever one fits the situation)and finally became a warrior/medicine cat at 18 moons. She has lived a nice life ever since and would like a mate. :)

Roleplay Sample (Required for first advanced bio): Embertear awakened as a noise startled her. She rose from her nest in the medicine cat's den and yawned. The noise repeated, sounding more urgent. She recognized it as Meadowbreeze's caterwaul. "She must be kitting!" she thought. Embertear shook out her long, flowing, halloween-colored coat and raced out of her den. She entered the nursery to see her friend panting in agony....

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Character Name:Embertear

Character Age:36 moons

Gender:She-cat

Alliance:ThunderClan

Rank:Warrior

Appearance (6 or more sentences):Embertear is a large maine coon she-cat with black and orange fur. Her fur is very long and fluffy and her body structure is naturally large. She walks with an elegance that flaunts her fur. Her legs and tail are long and her tail has a large flourish of fur at the tip. Embertear's underbelly and paws are all white. Her eyes are an icy blue that are very piercing. Her muzzle is sharp and her whiskers are long with a nose that is a nice pinkish color.

Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below. Those are additional requirements): Embertear is a kind she-cat that can be very helpful and loving towards her fellow clanmates. She will be delightfully pleasant when she greets her friends and is not harsh on her enemies. She tries to return rudeness with kindness and she believes in peace rather than fighting to solve problems. Embertear will listen to other cat's problems, no matter how personal, and will try to give her honest opinion no matter what. She always keeps her head up and can come off as a powerful being. Over all she is a nice she-cat with a big heart.

---Likes (at least 3):She likes to take walks in the forest, help other cats, and she LOVES voles
--- Dislikes (at least 3):She does not like fighting, rude cats, and fish
---Strengths (No MORE than 5):She is a pretty fast runner and is best at hunting prey on the ground.
---Weaknesses (At least 3):She is not a good fighter and is terrible at fishing. She can sometimes be 'too nice' and can not accept that some cats are just evil and can not be changed.

History (8 or more sentences):Embertear's mother and father were both kittypets. She was born a kittypet in the winter with two other siblings. Because of the harsh weather conditions, her brothers, Ash and Blaze, died when they were 1 moon. She lived with her mother until she was about 7 moons but hated the kittypet life. She wanted go out and explore. So she escaped from her twolegs and lived in the forest as a loner until she was about 12 moons. Then she found Thunderclan and joined it. She trained as an apprentice under Crystalstep to be a warrior and finally became a warrior at 18 moons. She has lived a nice life ever since and would like a mate. [img alt=:)]http://warriorcatsrpg.com/Smileys/grey_cats/smiley.gif[/img]

Roleplay Sample (Required for first advanced bio): Embertear awoke as she had been startled by a noise. She yawned and listened to see what the noise was. When she didn't hear it again, she shrugged and shook out her mane of orange and black fur. She then groomed thoroughly, her tongue slid over every fiber of fur to ensure the cleanest condition. When she was satisfied she stood and exited the warriors den. She padded over to the freshkill pile and saw Crystalstep, her old mentor, sitting beside it. She politely smiled at her and meowed a pleasant greeting, "Hello Crystalstep, how is your morning going?"

Crystalstep looked up from her sparrow and smiled. "Hi Embertear, it is going great. What about you?" she meowed in response.

Embertear took a plump vole off of the pile of freshkill and turned back to Crystalstep. "I am doing fine," she replied.

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мяѕ.ρσттєя-мαℓfσу wrote:

Character Name:Embertear

Character Age:36 moons

Gender:She-cat

Alliance:ThunderClan

Rank:Warrior

Appearance (6 or more sentences):Embertear is a large maine coon she-cat with black and orange fur. Her fur is very long and fluffy and her body structure is naturally large. She walks with an elegance that flaunts her powerful personality and keeps her head held high with an essence of a experienced warrior. Her legs are long and her tail has a large flourish of fur at the tip. Embertear's underbelly and abnormally small paws are pure white, like snow. Her eyes are an icy blue that can be very piercing and this helps her hold strong gazes and glares. Her muzzle is sharp and her whiskers are long with a nose that is a nice pinkish color.

Personality (6 or more sentences--these sentences form their own section and do NOT count towards the 4 groups below. Those are additional requirements): Embertear is a kind she-cat that can be very helpful and loving towards her fellow clanmates. She will be delightfully pleasant when she greets her friends and is not harsh on her enemies. She tries to return rudeness with kindness and she believes in peace rather than fighting to solve problems. Embertear will listen to other cat's problems, no matter how personal, and will try to give her honest opinion no matter what. She always keeps her head up and can come off as a powerful she-cat with a defined purpose. Over all she is a nice she-cat with a big heart.

---Likes (at least 3):She likes to take walks in the forest, help other cats, and she LOVES voles
--- Dislikes (at least 3):She does not like fighting, rude cats, or fish
---Strengths (No MORE than 5):She is a pretty fast runner and is best at hunting prey on the ground.
---Weaknesses (At least 3):She is not a good fighter and is terrible at fishing. She can sometimes be 'too nice' and can not accept that some cats are just evil and can not be changed.

History (8 or more sentences):Embertear's mother and father were both kittypets their whole life. She was born a kittypet in winter with two other siblings, Ash and Blaze. Because of the harsh weather conditions her brothers died when they were 1 moon. She lived with her mother until she was about 7 moons but hated the kittypet life. She wanted go out and explore and experience the world as a free cat. So she escaped from her twolegs and lived in the forest as a loner until she was about 12 moons. Then she found Thunderclan and joined it as an apprentice under Crystalstep to be a warrior. She finally became a warrior at 18 moons with her mentor and all of her fellow clanmates proud of her.. She has lived a nice life ever since and would now like a mate. :)

Roleplay Sample (Required for first advanced bio): Embertear awoke as she had been startled by a noise. She yawned and listened to see what the noise was. When she didn't hear it again, she shrugged and shook out her mane of orange and black fur. She then groomed thoroughly, her tongue slid over every fiber of fur to ensure the cleanest condition. When she was satisfied she stood and exited the warriors den. She padded over to the freshkill pile and saw Crystalstep, her old mentor, sitting beside it. She politely smiled at her and meowed a pleasant greeting, "Hello Crystalstep, how is your morning going?"

Crystalstep looked up from her sparrow and smiled. "Hi Embertear, it is going great. What about you?" she meowed in response.

Embertear took a plump vole off of the pile of freshkill and turned back to Crystalstep. "I am doing fine," she replied.

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