Will I ever be able to talk? (the story of Ivybreeze) please comment.

Leader: Stormstar - dark gray tabby tom with blue eyes
Deputy: Roaringpelt - dark gray tom with amber eyes
Medicine cat: Leafstream - light brown tabby she-cat with green eyes.
Warriors:
Growlbreeze - redish tom with light blue eyes
Icestream - white and really light gray she-cat with blue eyes. Apprentice Jewlpaw - light gray tabby she-cat with brown eyes
Hawkpelt - Brown tabby tom with amber eyes. Apprentice Flamepaw - flame colored tabby tom with blue eyes
Brownfur - darkish brown tabby tom with blue eyes. Apprentice Darkpaw - black tom with blue green eyes
Runningleaf - brown tabby she-cat with green eyes.
Barkpelt - brown tabby tom with amber eyes
Redheart - redish she-cat with hazel eyes Apprentice Ivypaw - silver gray tabby she-cat with hazel eyes
Hollystorm - black with a little white she-cat with hazel eyes
Lionroar - golden tom with blue eyes Apprentice Birchpaw - goldenish tom with amber eyes
Darkpelt - black tom with brown eyes
Goldenleaf - golden she-cat with blue eyes Apprentice Emberpaw - golden she-cat with pretty green eyes
Doveheart - gray she-cat with pretty brown eyes Apprentice - Russetpaw - pretty redish she-cat with hazel eyes
Queens:
Fernheart - light brown tabby with violet eyes (mother of Hawkpelts kits, Quailkit - brown tabby tom with amber eyes, Crystalkit - black she-kit with violet eyes, and Brightkit - gray and white she-kit with hazel eyes.)
Blackflower - black with a little white and beautiful violet eyes (mother of Darkpelts kit, Silverkit - tiny silverish she-kit with startling blue eyes)
Elders:
Yellowheart - black she-cat wit yellow eyes
Brokenear - brown tabby tom with a broken ear and blue eyes

Leader: Nightstar - black she-cat with deep blue eyes
Deputy: Tigerspirit - ginger with black stripes she-cat with blue eye
Medicine cat: Firepelt - ginger tom with amber eyes Apprentice Jaystorm - gray tabby tom with hazel eyes

Leader: Cregstar - brown tabby tom with green eyes Apprentice Darkpaw - black she-cat with blue green eyes
Deputy: Sorrelfern - light brown tabby she-cat with green blue eyes
Medicine cat: Thistleflame - light brown tabby tom with amber eyes

Leader: Moonstar - silverish tabby she-cat with light blue eyes
Deputy: Waterclaw - dark gray tabby tom with blue eyes
Medicine cat: Bumbleflight - gray tabby tom with amber eyes Apprentice Lilypaw - pale gray she-cat with blue green eyes

Ivypaw is a shy cat, VERY shy, but her spirit is different, firey almost.

"Ivypaw is very shy, are you sure she is one of them?" Bluestar asked the group of StarClan warriors.
"Yes, I believe she is." Spottedleaf said.
"Yes I agree, she might seem shy, but she has a firey spirit." Ivypool said.
"Well what should we do? Tell them? Or wait?" Jayfeather said impatiently.
"Lets wait." Leafpool said.
"Are you sure?" Lionblaze asked.
"Yes." Leafpool replied. "I think it would be for the best."
"I agree." Bluestar said.
"it's decided." Yellowfang said.

I looked at the camp. I liked ot here, but I wished I wasn't such a shy kit. My mentor Redheart walked over.
"Ready for battle training?" She asked. I nodded, and followed her. We reached the training arena. Russetpaw, Emberpaw, Jewlpaw, Birchpaw, and Flamepaw were there with there mentors.
"Flamepaw and Birchpaw, will you give us a demonstration?" Goldenleaf asked.
"Sure." The two replied. They began fighting. I watched, I could do some of the moves, but would I? Being so shy I could back down. But I tried to swallow my fear. We all first went with our mentors. Redheart showed me some moves. I swallowed, and copied her as best I could. She nodded.
"Good" I felt better, maby I could do this. I looked over at the others.
"Why? Can't I make up my own moves?" Flamepaw was saying.
"I said later, now you need to copy me." His mentor Hawkpelt said. We learned a little more, then headed back, the gathering was tonight, my first one. I hopped I could cope with it.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~I watched as the others crossed the tree to get to the gathering place. I just hoped I wouldn't fall. It was my turn, I slowly walked across, I made it! I went over to my mother Hollystorm.
"What do I do?" I whispered.
"Just talk for a bit, then the leaders will call." She replied. So wearily I walked. I went to a group of apprentices.
"How is WindClan?" A cat asked, he was a gray tabby with deep brown eyes.
"Good.." said Flamepaw, but he was cut off by a black tom.
"Graypaw! We don't care how WindClan is doing!" The black tom told Graypaw.
"I was just asking." I looked at all the cats, then at Graypaw, I nearly fell. Great! Just great I have a crush on him." I thought. Then the leaders called. I looked up.
"ShadowClan is well." Said Nightstar, the leader. "We have had two new kits Fallowkit and Barkkit, born to Grassstorm and Willowpool." The cats congratulated Grassstorm. Then Cregstar, the leader of ThunderClan went, then Moostar, RiverClans leader, the Stormstar, leader of my clan, WindClan.
"WindClan is doing great. We have had a good amount of pray, and we have two new apprentices, Ivyaw and Darkpaw." I looked at my paws as the cats cheered my name. My brother on the other hand stood up tall. I had been born first, but yet I was the smalll shy one.

It had been three days since the gathering. I was now hunting, I wasn't very good. Redheart tried to help, but all I had caught was a shrew, and a mouse. I dropped them on the freshkill pile, then Leafstream the medicine cat called me. I walked over.
"ivypaw.. Would you like to be my apprentice? " She asked me. I looked at the ground. Should I? I slowly nodded.
"Great!" Leafstream said. "I guess you'll have to talk to the leader." I stared, I couldn't talk! "I'll talk for you. My new mentor said. I followed her to the leaders den. The leader Stormstar was there, eating a rabbit.
"Yes?" He asked.
"Ivypaw would like to be a medicine cat." Leafstream told him. Thats not what I want but I guess I need to I won't be a great warrior anyway, I thought.
"Is this what you want?" Stormstar said. No! I thought, but I nodded yes.
"Very well, I will tell the Clan." Stormstar said heading out, I followed him. He announced my decision to the clan. I looked at my paws. The cats stared, then cheered. Stormstar quieted them down.
"We have three new warriors." Stormstar said. "Emberpaw, Flamepaw, and Birchpaw." The three came forward. "Emberpaw, Flamepaw, and Birchpaw, do you promise to_________ ?(I forgot what te words were)
"I do." Emberpaw said.
"Well duh!" Flamepaw said.
"I promise." Birchpaw said.
"Then from now on, Emberpaw shall be known as Emberheart, and Flamepaw you will be known as Flamestrike, and Birchpaw shall be known as Birchpelt." I looked at them, maby I should have been a warrior. The clan cheered. I went over to Leafstream.
"Come, I'll teach you all you need to know about being a medicine cat." ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
"We need a medic cat!" Called one of the warriors. I ran over, Brownfur was bleeding.
"Where's Leafstream, Goldenleaf asked. I shrugged. I wish I knew! I tried to remember wat was used for bleeding. Cobweb! Then.... hmm...
"Are you sure you should trust Ivypaw, she's so.. shy and" Flamestrike said, but was cut off by Russetpaw.
"Thats not nice, have more respect mouse brain!" She said. I got some cobweb, and put it on Brownfurs injuries. But I needed another herb.