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    [justify][font=constantia][size=7pt]I am addicted to writing, and my hands hurt from writing with pen and paper so much. So why not type? It doesn't hurt your hands as fast as holding a pen and scribbling on a page. To me, anyway. Anyway, this is where I shall be storing stories, song lyrics, poems, etc. I'll probably even write out a history and personality for some characters I will use in the future.


    You are welcome to comment, whether it be to help me on something/tell me what I could improve on, or just plain comment. It'd be wonderful if you could post some of your stories, poems, lyrics, or whatever else you may have, right here. I always love to have something to read, because I'm a bit of a nerd. I'm proud to be a nerd. *pushes glasses up* Let's get this party started, you beautiful roses!


    This will be the most horrible thing you will ever read in your entire life. I don't even know what it is. It just came to my mind, because I used to have a friend. But... Like all of my 'friends', she drifted off and joined a bigger party. I'm glad to be a party of one, though. It's much more peaceful, and it gives me room. I don't like being touched. Or talked to for a certain amount of time, because I talk to myself a lot. It's way easier than talking to another human being. Darn, I'm rambling. I always ramble.


    ~ ~ ~


    "A Never Was Friendship"


    How is it, that we've grown apart so fast
    And you haven't a single tear shed?
    I'm lying face down, on the ground
    With nothing but a bleeding heart,
    A broken soul
    And I'm screaming in utter agony


    Have you forgotten
    Forgotten that I was the one
    I walked up to you
    I said, "Hey, you wanna join?
    Let's be friends."
    Have you forgotten
    Forgotten about the times
    Oh, the times we'd laugh, with no reason behind
    We'd laugh until we dropped
    And we'd la-a-a-augh


    Maybe you have, you have forgotten
    And that's alright, alright? alright
    You left me in the dust
    But it opened up my eyes, it helped me realize
    You made me realize
    You can't trust a single soul, not one


    But hey, guess what?
    I'm a new person
    Yeah, I'm a new me
    You don't scare me
    You won't break these barriers
    You can't take this life I'm living
    You can't burn it to ashes


    You've forgotten me, this I know
    And you know, yes, you know
    That I couldn't care less
    I couldn't care less
    And this oblivion I've found
    It's sweeter
    It's sweeter than the friendship
    The friendship we held for so very long
    This oblivion, yes it's sweeter
    Than the memory I put in song


    Ooh, ooh, oh oh, ooh
    Ooh, ooh, oh oh, ooh


    You can't take me under
    No, you won't bury me
    You won't drag me six feet under
    I won't let you, let you pull me down


    Oh, you can't take me under
    No, you won't bury me
    You won't drag me six feet under
    I won't let you, let you pull me down


    I believed in the lie you call "friendship"
    Our friendship was nothing
    Not to you
    You used me, yes, you used me
    But I have news for you
    And I know you won't like it
    You can't use me anymore
    Nothing is the same, and it never ever will be
    It might be me, but it's definitely you
    You broke it, our friendship
    And it was all because
    Because you wanted to fit in
    And I guess I was too "out-of-fashion"


    Well, I'm sorry, but


    I'm a new person
    Different than what you think
    I'm a new me
    Never the same, I shall be
    You don't scare me
    I'm the monster under you bed
    You won't break these barriers
    I'm not a twig, not anymore
    You can't take this life I'm living
    It's mine, and not yours
    You can't burn it to ashes
    Because I'm the one holding the match


    Ooh, ooh, oh oh, ooh
    Ooh, ooh, oh oh, ooh


    Ooh, ooh, oh oh, ooh
    Ooh, ooh, oh oh, ooh


    No, you can't take me under
    I'm soaring with the clouds
    No, you won't bury me
    Because I have the shovel
    You won't drag me six feet under
    And I'm six feet off the ground
    I won't let you, no,
    I won't let you
    I won't let you, let you pull me down


    I'm a new person, yes, I'm a new me
    And, no, you can't stop me
    I'll light this match
    And I'll set fire
    I'll set fire to that thing
    What was it? Ah, yes
    This "friendship", we called it
    The match, it's burning
    And it's set fire to the lie
    It's set fire to this lie


    No more lies
    No, no more lies
    No more lies
    No, no more lies
    The fire, it's burning
    It's burning so bright
    It's gone, the lie is gone


    The lie we held, it's over


    The lie?
    No more, does it exist
    You are dust, dust
    You are only dust, dust
    Just dust
    This lie, it's gone
    It's perished, and the memory of you
    That memory of you
    That memory has burned
    It's burned ashes


    It's all ashes, now
    Just ashes
    But i'll never forget
    I'll never forget what you told me, no
    That lies, they are for liars
    Lies are for liars
    Yes, lies are for liars


    Ooh, ooh, oh oh, ooh
    Ooh, ooh, oh oh, ooh


    And it's all burned to ashes
    Yes, it's all burned to ashes
    It's ashes, ashes
    They're just ashes, now


    ~ ~ ~


    So... Long... So... Confusing... It doesn't even... I mean, it makes senseright?, but it just... It's all over the place. I'm critiquing my own work, because I can. I always doubt myself. I always end up being right, so ha! ha...?

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