PRIVATE!!! Helping a friend learn to RP

Try using "you're" and "least" and question marks.

"Are all cats this dull? What do you dull things do for fun?" HollyLeaf sat down and sighed. "This is why I don't attempt to talk to cats. I like talking to my own kind much more."

She jumped away. "Mousebrain. You cats have no sense of fun. Fun is danger, not hunting slow and fat mice. I like skydiving and traveling through dark and secret tunnels. I know tunnels that lead to amazing secret places where no cat has ever placed their paw."

She hissed, "Are you that dumb? Seriously? No cat has ever stepped paw there, or ever will other than the two cats who by prophecy had to come. I am its gaurdian."

"A stupid one! What do you think he would think if I let you in while he is out traveling? The cavern of Hedwig is only for those he deems worthy!" She paused, "Actually.....If you want to see it, I could permit you temporary shapeshifting, but the path there is dangerous. Are you still interested?"

"Come along then." HollyLeaf immediately ran off to the tip of a huge cliff. She sat at the edge patiently waiting for SwiftWind to arrive. Once he caught up she walked over to him. "I transfer to you the secret of shapeshifting, not to be known unless by a true shapeshifter." She headbutted him roughly and stood back as he glowed for a second. "Welcome to the Unknown shapeshifters. Now, imagine yourself as a pergrine falcon, and you shall become one." She suddenly transformed into an albino peregrine falcon, "Hurry up!"

"Be careful of the current. It's pretty strong!" She warned him. "Come on!" She dived straight down at a huge speed, "WATCH OUT!" She called. She began dodging the various rocks and cliffs, staying only half a foot above the raging river. She kept dodging until she reached a place where the water touched the top of the rock. She perched on a ledge and waited for SwiftWind. "We can't stay as falcons here. Become a trout and dive into the water fall." She turned into a trout and dived into the water. The river swept her under the rock and down the waterfall. When she reached the bottom she turned into a wolf and climbed onto the shore. She looked around the beautiful cavern silently.

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It was surrounded by weeping willow trees, maples, and dogwoods. "Strange to think that all this is here." She said happily. Birds were chirping high in the trees, while fish swam calmly in the lake.

"It is. And I am the last wolf guardian of this place. Ever since the last owl guardian, Freya, died, the current guardian has not been seen. He ran away, leaving this place under my care. Now you know my true form though. I am a wolf who is older than anyone you have ever met. I've been cursed with immortality. Feel free to hunt in the river....I-I will be back later. There is something I need to do." She sighed and padded off.

A few hours later she returned silently. She cuffed him over the ear, "Wake up mousebrain. Come on. There's more to see."

"Come on now, or I'll leave you to the owls!" She growled.

"The owls I speak of hunt cats for food. I've been with them on many hunting trips. These aren't your normal screech owls. These are fully grown barn owls and snowy owls. They protect this place with your life. Now shut up and come on." She growled.