The Final Stone

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    Ooc: lol :p


    Bic: Alice stared as he left and waited patiently until he returned. She acted normal. Casual. No guards seemed to notice her at all. She watched closely at fang, glaring wide-eyed at the decapitated body. She examined the other guards closely, realizing how upset they seemed and how they took their helmets off. Maybe it was to honor that guard? She didn't know. All she knew was this spun her mind roughly to a new aspect. She now seemed to see the guards as simply 'people'. They react the same as anyone would if they lost someone. She sighed inwardly and suddenly a shadow engulfed her and she turned to see a tall, short, black haired guard. His helmet must have been somewhere else and his right cheek was scarred deeply and dry blood outlined the edges of the wound. "W-Who are you?" he asked, examining her closely. Alice's stomach tightened and she held her breathe in fear. Her eyes shone but she was sure to hide her emotion. "Im just a survivor." She put simply, struggling to keep her voice steady. usually I'm good at lying... Why is this time so different? when the guard looked a bit doubtful and suspicious, looking at her clothing, she added. "Just checking on the damage. How many survivors are there?" she asked formally, sounding. Bit more better and confident. She hoped he'd just turn and leave but he gazed at her longer, finally, it seemed he let go of a thought and walked past her, passing Fang as he made his way to her and spoke lowly to one of the other guards. Alice sighed in sudden, utter relief. She gazed at Fang. "Well?" she bravely, softly asked as he came up. "what happened?" she couldn't help but notice the negative stance in how he returned to her side. Looking down at the floor was never a good sign but surely he would take more of an effect in if he realized his sister was dead? Or maybe he was struggling to hold in it all because then wasn't the time to burst into despair for it would instantly blow their cover as to why a survivor was worried so much about a young little girl and was extremely emotional of it? She shoved the thoughts out her mind stubbornly. There was no way she'd let this happen. They had to find her. Something told her she was alive. Girls aren't as delicate as they look. she thought, trying to be reasonable with decent thinking. Im sure she found a way to get away from all this and stay alive. she gazed into Fang's eyes, wanting to tell him what she had just said to herself but if what she thought of his sister dying was proven to be utterly true, she had no words for comfort.

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    Fang slowly looked up, his face having a dark demeanor, "Well, they didn't bother too search the corpses, for an identity, but they said all the survivors and the evacuated were taken to Aquarius, In their underwater domes, in case this strikes in other land based cities I assume." He looked over to the side. "They said multiple children and babies were evacuated from the castle. Meaning she's most likely in that group." Thought it seemed like good news Fang took it pretty hard. "The bad part is, if she has no one to pick her up, she may go to a foster care, and since my family could care less, despite possibly living 2 hours maybe even the same town as her foster home." noticing he once again trailed off towards his idiotic family. "What I mean to say is... She may get adopted, and I can't say anyone in my family is reliable enough to take her back, or fight it out in court and win." His face tried to soften but it was hard, the thoughts overwhelmed his brain it was impossible for him to leave his rage behind. "I'll just drop you off at your house, it's a dangerous trek to go from Terra to Sol to Aquarius, It's Forest Jungle Desert, Then swampy wasteland until we hit the beaches, then you take the Aqua Subway tunnels." He frowned. "As much as I hate to say it, I ain't going to let you go through that, just to find a girl that you probably could care less about." He said immediately wanting to take it back for being rude and untrue, but it was too late now, His family involvement always made him wrathful in someway and it this anger wasn't letting him take back the words.

    ---------Character Evaluation.--------------------
    Ooc: I DID THIS CUZ I'M BORED!
    Miri: SHES DA BEST EVAR BECAUSE SHES MIEN :D
    (Srsly tho)
    Bryan: You can easily tell his attitude, and he doesn't really think when doing things, and he doesn't really care, he's like a hero who doesn't want to be a hero but is forced too due to fate. He gets along well with others but is easily annoyed. He's an Acceptable character, but his past and emotional patterns should show more.
    Tigris Group: Attitude and personalities are nailed on the head, as well as determining relationships with one another, they don't say much but when they do talk you can tell what they mean clearly, Wavern is a confused small child, Lenier is responsible and caring, and (Forgot his name Dx) Obviously has a arrogant streak with a bit of anger issues. Great group of character who fit together greatly, but back story is what is lacking.
    Fang: His Backstory is very well foreshadowed, not revealing everything or details but still enough to get the idea Fang hates them to the core, but still holds deep affection for one special part of the family. His relationship with others usually is depended on gender and occupation, meaning he's very judgmental and believes in stereotypes. Such as guards are heartless who follow orders, or girls aren't tough enough to trek dangerous areas, and that girls should be treated with more loving words than with men and others. His emotions are well hidden, but in a good way, you can tell what he's thinking but he doesn't like to admit it. He shows emotion without showing it. Amazing character I only see that his sentancing and wording is a bit confusing
    Alice/Fallz: Much like Fang you think clearly, and descriptively making everyone know how your character feels about a situation. You also use both obvious statements and not so obvious signs to show it as well which is an amazing quality I don't see very often. Your character like Fang's and Tigris' Group react well too certain situations as if it were a real life problem/accomplishment, you speak as if it were reality which is another amazing quality. You have no problem describing emotions, and you get along well with others, and You and Fang make a great pair, because of how similar and different your characters are when they compare them, it's the perfect amount. The only thing I recommend working on is Backstory, the foreshadowing is too little or not at all visible in your posts, which means you just need a bit more foreshadowing to get a general idea on your backstory.

    Ooc: lol okay. I'll work on it Miri ;3


    Bic: Alice gazed at Fang in astonishment. She couldn't help but feel like he was purposely abandoning her and she felt her mind flood back to when she was younger and her entire family except for her single cat was wiped out. She had felt more alone than ever and the last things she said to her mother... She can never take that back. She stared at Fang as he made his last statement and quoted it as an echo in her mind: "As much as I hate to say it, I ain't going to let you go through that, just to find a girl that you probably could care less about." she felt as if he grabbed a sword and pierced it through her heart, ripping it inside out. Heart-broken and awe-stricken she had no words to say back. Did he really believe that? Her chest felt strange and hollow, she couldn't describe how it felt except emptiness. It wasn't even like she had spent so much time with fang but he began to grow on her. Why couldn't he see that? Her eyes began to water and she forced herself to look away and tear her eyes off of his. "I-Dont understand-I just-" she halted and stopped herself as her mind suddenly bashed into the times when she had been so alone, desperate and suicidal after her family's death. And how can Fang possibly believe what he said? She was so shocked and heart-stabbed that she didn't take time to notice the regret in his eyes. She turned to him. "I lost-" she stopped herself abruptly. She was going to tell her past. now. "Alot." she finished, gazing sadly into his eyes. "More than a sister, more than a home. I had a whole family like you. A father, mother, a brother, a sister. I never cared much about them, the last thingsbi told my mother was to get out of my life. I was angry, I didn't mean what I said. I didn't realize what I had until it was all gone and now I live with regret everyday of my worthless life." she gazed scorchingly into his eyes. "If you believe I wouldn't care about any form of family than your blind. Thanks for caring." she turned to leave. The young boy she thought was cute and sweet was gone. That's all she saw now and she slowly walked away. She halted and turned back. She walked up to the guards. She stood up to them broadly. "Kill me." she hissed. She has just had enough. "I am no survivor of this castle, I'm an intruder." she paused. " and [b]i caused this explosion."[/b] she finished, lying. goodbye frosty. she quietly farewelled. If the sudden boy of her dreams was going to abandon her just like that so be it. She was still pierced in her heart with pain, a scorching pain she was so surprised she loved him so much, and goodbye fang. she stared expectantly at the guards, I. Hope they weren't too despicable to kill an intruder.

    Fang listened to her, every word and sentence like a lashing whip, striking him. He did not frown or sigh, or say some stupid apology, of course he was going to apologize, but now was not the right time, she would call him a liar or possibly worst. The words had rage in them, but it was empty rage you could hear the sorrow and pity within most of that emptiness but the rage was definitely there just to get his attention. She then stormed off and he watched helplessly. he began to walk towards her direction but his legs were like Jell-O wobbly and nervous, afraid to talk to her again. Her watched her every step as he stumbled what almost seemed drunkenly towards her, but he was much slower even though she was walking. That was until she began speaking to some guards, Fang heard the whole story the fake one about how she destroyed the town. That was when his legs got their crap together, and began to run. But then he stopped. "No ones going to belive that." he thought, Fang was hesitating for some reason he was literally looking for excuses to not approach her. Then the Guards raised their swords with scowls, as if they were trying to avenge something or some crap like that. "That does it." He mumbled rage filling up inside of him, he was tired of the emotion he was tired of the guilt, he normally did this too monsters but wrath was an overpowering force by this point. he grabbed his knife as he ran over there and carved into the back of his hand, avoiding veins but still making the symbol. Before they struck he jumped in front and stuck his hand out with his fingers in a snapping formation. "This must be the accomplice." the guards agreed as they raised their swords once more. Fang gritted his teeth and his eyes narrowed in a dark demeanor. He snapped his fingers and one of the guards burst into flames, his screech was almost pleasing to Fang. "Fire alchemy is so amusing, it helps with anger issues, I've been told of course instead of using it on monsters or dummies like everyone else, I use it on the people who try to harm, innocent sweethearts." Fang said gritting his teeth harder and his eyes getting wilder and wilder, his partner beginning to run away. "Listen to me." Fang smiled. "You...Will...Never....Lay...a....hand.....On .....Her....Ever!" He asked between every word he snapped his fingers letting the fire cover him again and again. Fang breathed a sigh of relief, glad all his anger was out and He glad Alice was aliv- Fang stopped and thought for a moment, He had just incinerated a guard to death, in front of her. He knew It was wrong thing to do but he turned towards her, He apologized for everything, He explained that he mean't he didn't want her involved, not that she didn't care, He apologized for making his problems seemed worse, and worst of all he was sorry for letting his anger get the best of him. "I know apologizing isn't even close to making up for what I've done in this short amount of time, and it's even farther when you add the worrying you and everything." he felt so pitiful, so dumb, He deserved it and he knew it, he braced himself for the backlash and waited for her response to everything she had witnessed.
    Ooc: Holy crap sorry for bombarding you with all that stuff, Dang.
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    Ooc: When I look back on that, it look really over dramatic, sorry if it looks kinda stupid. I forgot to Mention Fire alchemy is one of my favorite weapons to use in a rp, I mean seriously snapping your fingers and setting someone on fire, how cool is that!

    Ooc: lol no fang it wasn't overly dramatic I think my character was but I made her really sensitive :3


    Bic: (( when I get back from school ^-^ ))

    Well amnesiacs usually tend to remember bit by bit and piece by piece, and yes you could show a bit more emotion you're pretty straight forward, like Fang, he shows his emotion in his thoughts but his character still holds all of it in. You could do somethin like that, I'm just trying to improve roleplaying capacity, and I was bored lol xD ;)

    Fallen ❦ wrote:


    Ooc: lol no fang it wasn't overly dramatic I think my character was but I made her really sensitive :3


    Bic: (( when I get back from school ^-^ ))


    Ooc: I think you had more of a reason to do what you did, the whole "Kill me" Thing was like wait what, but it's somewhat realistic due to holding all your emotions in and feel like you just got stabbed in the back by a person you thought you were falling in love with.

    Ooc: You know i base my chacters of myself and that i only show my emotional side to people i care for so of course i'm straight forward to a ghost and shiz XD


    Ic: Bryan slashed at Miri.

    Oh my gawd x_x I promise I'll reply tommorow, my battery is 3% it's like everything is refrain me from replying... If I don't end up replying tonmorow you can throw ketchup at me. ^-^